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    dots Submission Name: Abstract Nonsensedots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 815
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    Description:
       This is an abstract poem based solely on the sound of the words. Its only purpose is to feel good as you read it aloud. Any other meaning derived from it is unintentional and purely coincidental.


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    dotsAbstract Nonsensedots
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    pamper an amorous eloquent
    carnivorous bowling ball

    succulent yellow cellar door
    natural cartoon wall

    fundamental elemental
    feline elephant

    fellow elbow hysteria
    hyper gentle galleon

    luminous melancholy melody
    savor relevant walleye quality




    Submitted on 2005-06-12 22:43:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is aural heaven!
    Ha ha, love your description, I didn't even bother to find meaning, sometimes meaning is derived from lack of meaning.. ;)

    I adored your choice of words
    and especially reading them, and savouring them on my tongue..

    I also like how you incorporated cellar door with succulent, it just goes so nicely..

    'hyper gentle galleon' I love this! haha and when you say it aloud it could be one word..
    and 'feline elephant' that just rocks.

    Words not because they mean, because they sound.

    thanks for the sonics journey
    alexis.
    | Posted on 2005-06-25 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      abstract indeed yet presenting real time analogies.
    "fundamental elemental
    feline elephant" reminds me of Mary Popkins.
    Last two lines conjure up the sadness of a wallflower
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      strangely enough, this reminds me of t.s. eliot's 'the love song of j. alfred prufrock.' i love those first two lines, 'pamper an amorous eloquent' even without the words that follow it. i do. this is great nonsense.

    i like how you play with words. it shows a real appreciation for them. :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by adiaphane | [ Reply to This ]
      my my that was some tasty sound candy my dear! what a fun thing to do, you have created quite an abstract painting with your words. brava! we can all find things in and between the lines too, can't we? wonderful job.
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      First time I read anything of the sort. I am not sure what I feel about it.

    But what I can say is that you hit your target in the middle. It makes no sense. no hidden meaning to me either, the words are not even linked in meaning.
    You have a musical rhythm going on. That is what you wanted, you got it.

    Peace
    Viviane
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the line "feline elephant" that was funny.. reminded me of a movie.. "donny darko" where drew barriimore said out of all the different combinations of words in the english language.. cellar door.. was the most beautiful.. mmm.. anyway.. interesting read.. wierd.. different
    shaun
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
      You were right in saying that this poem has no meaning whatsoever. But it does flow off the tongue quite nicely when read aloud. It made me feel happy reading it.

    So, I am sure you got your purpose across in this.

    Thank you for the happy read.

    Brightest Blessings,
    Crystal
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the disclaimer in the description....almost feels like there should be a 'the poet accepts no responsibility for any meanings derived from the following'

    Its a very tasteful (in all meanings of the word) poem...fun to read out loud, and great to just lose yourself in the abstract imagery....

    "Feline elephant" brought a smile to my face...as did the rest of the poem, really - thanks for that!

    All the best,

    Katia
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by Katia | [ Reply to This ]
      The beauty of the abstract is that it is cryptically disguised and I enjoyed this piece for that very reason. I don't consider anything truly without meaning as anything artistically offered is worthy in itself.
    Thanks for the original read.
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      OK! First I just read the title and poem, then I checked for your intro. I still haven't read the other's comments. My first impression was that this is an exercise in sonics. Your intro kind of confirmed that. Your intro also reminded me of a disclaimer Mark Twain wrote in a book I read once, to wit,
    This is a work of fiction. Any one finding similarities between the characters of this story and any person, now living or dead, shall be hung by the neck.
    So, nope, I am not stating any meanings that I may or may not have found here! ,;-)
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      eloquence live in zoological spaces between the bowling
    ball that congested my amoire Du Fay composed a mass for
    St. Anthony of Padua but it was removed prior to malignancy
    even then fighting for place in history filed under Renaissance man all topics converged under the dripping canopies in Rome's finest outdoor cafe, my bloodshot eyes resembled red stars, shot straight into iris eyes, it's my story, the red star wounds I've earned, they feel so real, and when the light returns, to my heart it will carve the beam inside like a lathe *magnificence*
    pardon my abstraction,or need I ask? great fun, thanks btd
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      HAHA! that's is so creative, oh my gosh it's so cool and funny! Your writing is amazing, It's phenomenal, I loved this one, it's so out there! Keep on writing! I'll keep on reading! :)

    **I.N.D.E.L.I.B.L.E._I.N.K**
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]


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