My Sweet Cutting Buddy by Ata

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Submission Name: My Sweet Cutting Buddy dots

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Author:	Ata_Khai
ASL Info:	16/M/US
Elite Ratio:	2.83 - 31/46/16
Words:	179

Class/Type:	Prose/Passion
Total Views:	378
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1094

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Yes, my first request for counseling. Don't let first impressions fool you. I sure shattered any respect for me, didn't I? That's what I get for wearing my favorite mask. Don't let first impressions fool you.

My Sweet Cutting Buddy dots

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Cutting...
I remember cutting with you.
You always cut deeper than I did.
You always licked the blood off of my chest, off of my arms, off of my legs.
I wondered what was wrong with you, but that was why I loved you.
You liked being cut...
"Oh, God yes!" was the reply you gave me when I asked if I could cut for you.
A sour, yet sweet relationship...
Oh, so sweet.
They always thought us to be weird, even before they saw the scars slashing across our bodies.
Even before they saw us half naked in a bathroom stall, cutting on each other's bodies.
Oh, your sweet blood, dripping into my mouth, mixed with sweat.
Getting in our eyes as we kissed each other.
Lying on the dirty tiles, gasping for breath, convulsing in a puddle of our own mixed blood.
Those are my sweetest memories of you.
Our bodies slick with sweat and blood, sliding together, wrapped up together.
Yes, we were truly together.
The loss of blood never bothered us.
Until it killed us.

Submitted on 2005-06-13 02:41:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  that was extreamly shocking...i am an ex cutter my friend was kinda like that always wanting me to do it with her though i never did
that was a very good and shocking
| Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by Im A Freak | [ Reply to This ]
  well i dont know how to respond to that.it shocked me because i used to cut myself but i never wanted anybody to do it with me.let alone anybody lick it.but this is your writing and some reason i did like it..
| Posted on 2005-07-06 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this poem a lot, it was different than any other one i have seen, and it intreaged me. i have never meet anyone else who cut, let alone actually cut with people people around... it's just very different, but very good... the whole time i was reading the poem i was wondering what would that be like... and trying to picture myself as if i were living the life of the poem... it's very good, and i liek the last part...

"Yes, we were truly together.
The loss of blood never bothered us.
Until it killed us."

that is the whole reason i have stopped, i always ask everyone who writes cutting poems to read mine WHO DO I TURN TO?... any feedback woudl be great, keep writing and if you ever need to talk i am here
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by OrangeWithWhite | [ Reply to This ]
  The language is matter of fact, presenting something many people would find abhorent as something almost acceptable. This slices through the shock of the subject matter. The short phrases with lots of commas give the piece a breathy, excited feeling which becomes very sensual. Having never had any inkling of this before (except a vague idea about self harm) I began to see immediately, on the first reading of the poem, how cutting each other could become a turn on. The ending tells me not to go there. I learned something. I thought the poem was great.
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by juanita | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this is so original. I always see people writing about cutting, but this brought it to a higher level. I really enjoyed it, and I thought it was quite interesting. I know a couple who did cut, or cut for the very first time... its a scary thing to hear about. Cutting is something so many people do to hide from numorous things. Most of it is to hide the pain.. but really it makes more pain..

I will like to check out more of your writings later.

stephanie
good work
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow this one was interesting i lkied the emotion put into this one in fact i liked the dementedness in this one it was great very good job keep it up.
| Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. I know it's cliché to say "i can relate!" but I really can. This pinpoints events that an individual and I experienced, and you have captured it in words It's great.
Also, thank you for the compliment on my newest poem.
I think this is great.
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by shes automatic | [ Reply to This ]
  dude. this is incredible. usually when i read about cutting its so dark and depressing but this one had a different taste to it. a fresher and deadlier taste. pretty awsome.
| Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by randomscreams | [ Reply to This ]

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