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    dots Submission Name: taking flight.dots

    Author: wilted_
    ASL Info:    20/f/singapore
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 138/110/29
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       for my ex-boyfriend, a budding pilot who is setting off to elsewhere for his training.

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    dotstaking flight.dots

    when I angle my head skywards
    in a particular direction,
    I can almost see you in the cockpit,
    piloting your life,
    trailing your dreams to
    far-off destinations
    before landing at a
    runway on the other end
    of my own.

    Can you now see,
    what you never could before,
    when you looked at me,
    as if through me,
    the long aerobridge
    to a different flight?

    I remind myself how
    I could once extend my hand and
    touch you beneath inhibition
    and kiss away my own fears
    that you now draw away from.

    I missed you.
    But time could pale even that.

    Submitted on 2005-06-13 07:06:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece is very interesting to read the imaginary is great and you did a wonderful job expressing your emotions in this write. The loss you are feeling comes right through your words and I like that alot you are quite a talented writer and this is another to add to my favs of yours. I can feel what you are portraying and it's lonely my fav line is this one.

    Can you now see,
    what you never could before,
    when you looked at me,

    So much emotion in these few words this is beautfully written.

    | Posted on 2006-06-26 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is so lonely, but there is a bit of hope at the end and I like that. The idea of kissing away your own fears, I really liked that too. I've been saying this a lot lately...people are doing a great job of changing all the overused phrases, clichés and such. This is very good and I am excited to read more of your work!
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice effort. Like the imagery very much; you've done well expressing the loss of the relationship (my condolences, BTW). Good effort.


    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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