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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    Description:
       I was obviously sad and lonely when I wrote this.


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    dotsAlonedots
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    Loneliness has settled in.
    It's in the air I breathe,
    every breath I take is suffocating me.
    It's the sun in the sky,
    blinding my vision.
    All I can see is emptiness around me,
    loneliness is all I can feel.

    My heart is beating,
    to the percussions of a sad song,
    My blood is pumping,
    to the rhythm of the beat.
    My tears fill an ocean of pain,
    flooding into the shores,
    waves of sadness consume me.

    My footsteps in teh sand,
    take the shape of a broken heart,
    my broken heart,
    that is soon swept away by the wind.

    Alone,
    I walk,
    no ending in sight.
    I try to imagine someone,
    walking next to me,
    holding my hand,
    guiding me,
    but the images don't come,
    my mind is empty.

    My hope sinks into the fading horizon,
    drown away with the sun,
    into the ocean of tears.
    My destiny reveals itself,
    as the darkness sets in.
    Pieces of my shattered dreams,
    protrude from the sky,
    vaguely illuminating my path,
    of never-ending sorrow.
    Leading me,
    through this ever-lasing journey,
    I shall travel,
    Alone.




    Submitted on 2005-06-13 10:36:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ya you reigned me in on this one...isn't the worst thing on this earth the fear of or actually being all alone? There's nothing quite like feeling so down, and there's no one to pick u back up. I think you definitely captured that feeling this writing...I know I felt it...great job...take care! ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]


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