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For A Moment; Then

Author: k.o.malley
ASL Info:    28/female/seattle
Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 50 /66 /30
Words: 138
Class/Type: Misc /Love
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For A Moment; Then

For a moment; my lover,
Then; my friend you said you’d be – Always!
How could I understand the cunning way you used me,
This brutality to cruel to comprehend.

For a moment; my beginning,
Then; my end you soon made that my reality.
So clever of you to pretend your elegance wasn’t meant
To be condescending.

For a moment; my savior,
Then; my sin you transformed into a glutens addiction.
No changing what we did to be pleased, yet our needs stayed
Away very carelessly indeed.

For a moment my desire was my pleasure,
For a moment my life was like living.
Then my passion was my pain,
Then my daring was like dying.

For a moment; my love,
Then, my love was in love with me unconditionally.

Submitted on 2005-06-13 10:46:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It sounds like a lot of regret. I really loved this piece. It sounded great and flowed beautifully!
The line "For a moment my life was like living" is going to stick with me for awhile. I totally captured my attention and had the biggest impact on me through the whole piece. Thanks for sharing!
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  very good.
I loved your style and how you put it all together with the..
for a moment ; then.

"For a moment; my beginning,
Then; my end you soon made that my reality.
So clever of you to pretend your elegance wasn’t meant
To be condescending."

i really liked this one.
all of them where put together really well.
Your wording was just perfect. It made the whole thing flow.

The ending was great. It just tied the whole thing together. I really loved the subject. it is something alot of people try and write about but rarly do as well as you.
Great job.
| Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
  Once again, you talent and ability to grab me heart and wake me up and take me to place I would otherwise not know. You are a truly talented writer and I am blessed and lucky and truly honored to call you my friend. You have the power to hold the world in the ink of your pen and the fiber of your paper. You are my inspiration and I love you.
| Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by tripsonme23 | [ Reply to This ]

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