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    dots Submission Name: Because Iím Better Than Youdots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    dotsBecause Iím Better Than Youdots
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    Bite me

    Just go ahead and bite me

    Slap my face with stinging words
    Beat me back with your disgusted eyes
    Twist my arm with forceful lies
    Bruise my ego and make sure it hurts

    Go ahead and break my heart
    Perfect your pain, make it art
    Take time to ruin me, ever so meticulous
    Embarrass and humiliate, make me look ridiculous

    Youíre a bitch

    Just a conniving, malicious bitch

    Stick a knife in my back and twist
    Spill my secrets like spoiled milk
    Hit me with your gossipís belt
    Pummel me with your rumor-clenched fist

    Tear my reputation to shreds
    Stab me in the back till Iím dead
    Manipulate your way to my downfall
    Degrade yourself to make me crawl

    It wonít make you greater

    Just because it hurts me, it wonít make you greater

    Call me fat and you wonít get thinner
    Expose my mistakes; it wonít change your past
    Scorn me, but the shame wonít last
    Win this fight; you wonít stay the winner

    Take down my self-confidence till Iím unsure
    Reduce my happiness till you feel secure
    Change me into a social leper
    But all your immaturity still wonít make you better

    Because Iím better than you

    Just because you try and break me, it will never change that Iím better than you





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      *applaudes*. .
    This is extremly deep. I pictured it all. It was terrific. I admire your word arrangment. It put power behind each line. I found hidden rhymes, but it wasn't read like it was supposed to rhyme. . ok that didnt make sense. .I could tell that you didnt try TOO hard to make it rhyme. I admire that most. Because most ppl, including me, make the mistake of tryin to hard. . But of course its a lesson to be learned with hard work and practice.. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this poem has alot of enrgy built up in it.I mean idid not get bored at all.When I read this I thought of my father and ex gf. so I can relate to this alot very nice job
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by bluesoxz | [ Reply to This ]


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