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    dots Submission Name: resolution with alliterationdots
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    Author: laniejane
    ASL Info:    26
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 53/67/36
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 736
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    Bytes: 312



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    dotsresolution with alliterationdots
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    Fugitive fleeing from fright
    Needing, numb, nearing night
    Midnights morphine mercellious motion
    Incurable instability, initiating inspiration
    writing weeping withering why?
    hiding humming, heavily high
    fevorish focus, finally freedom!
    pen, paper, pouring per diem




    Submitted on 2005-06-13 20:00:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well done! I loved the use of the same letter throughout the line and that must have been difficult in places! This was my fav, "Midnights morphine mercellious motion." Great work ~ I look forward to reading more of your works! Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting, no doubt. I read it from the beginning to the end and then began on the last line and moved upward.
    Either way it makes sense, because the goal is finding a resolution. I see there not tile for this piece and it seems confusing because your goal obviously led you into repeating consonant sounds. So I propose "resolution with alliteration" of another idea "consonance" or just "resolution". Thanks for letting me play in titles here, very cool write, great job.
    peace and love,
    nansofast
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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