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    dots Submission Name: The Soul Behind The Liesdots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 797
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    Bytes: 598



    Description:
       Um, just...me hurting..horribly..but hiding it...and others thinking they know..but they have no idea...nobody knows the soul behind my lies basically! Thanks for reading!


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    dotsThe Soul Behind The Liesdots
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    Nobody knows,
    The soul behind the lies.
    Hide my face with hands,
    That used to hold yours.
    Bury the pain with a smile,
    Meant only for you.
    Laugh to pretend,
    That my heart isn't breaking.
    Walls of life crumbling down,
    One at a time, slowly, teasing me,
    Like I'm not supposed to see,
    The pleasure upon their face,
    Of watching me fall apart.
    Broken, but I act whole.
    Pity in their eyes, but they will never know
    The hurt behind mine.
    Nobody knows,
    The soul behind the lies.




    Submitted on 2005-06-13 20:05:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i like this alot. its awesome. The flow is great what more can you ask for?I like how you said nobody knows,the soul behide the lies. thats very awesome.. well done
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by bluesoxz | [ Reply to This ]
      Great piece d flow is gewd, its short, simple and effective makes u realli think bout stuff GREAT JOB!
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by disturbed_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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