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    Author: disturbed_angel
    ASL Info:    14/F/Aus
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 22/22/11
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 198
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       origionally a piece i wrote 4 english class. State : wondering if I should be wit dis guy or not...! ENJOY!


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    Why does he fill my mind like a rushing flood?
    I know I should stay away, but I can’t
    He has hurt me before and yet I still love him
    He promises he won’t do it again
    He says we’ll be together forever
    As much as I want to believe him there’s a doubt in my mind
    I think about him all the time
    When he comes online a big smile appears on my face; like a little kid going to the circus for the first time
    Why does he torture me with his smile?
    The look in his eyes makes me melt; like ice-cream on a hot summers day
    He’s there for me when I need someone
    He comforts me
    He gives me compliments when I have self-doubt
    He makes me laugh and I feel like I could talk to him forever…

    But forever isn’t real
    It’s a fantasy, like a Cinderella story…
    I can’t go on believing a lie
    I have fallen hard and my heart is sinking in the quicksand of love
    I struggle to be free of his slavery,
    The more I try the harder I fall.
    I must leave him no matter how painful, no matter how shattered my heart will be…
    Goodbye forever and in this case forever is real.




    Submitted on 2005-06-13 21:00:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a really good poem, but i dont know about it too. i know its difficult to have someone hurt you constantly and have empty promises, but leaving him would hurt alot, for both.but, i dont know what the situation is or if its just a poem, either way the emotion was good, very powerful, good job!

    p.s. i LOVE your pic, (the oh so addicting)
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by whatever14 | [ Reply to This ]



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