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    dots Submission Name: Poetrydots

    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 294
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 680
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    This began its life as an essay in an online poetry writing workshop. However, I discovered that I kept returning to it as I wrote and reviewed the writing of other poets. It appears to be very connected to my approach and philosophy of poetry.

    I recently read it at a public performance. I was reading as I drummed. It felt very much like a poem itself. I've tweaked it a small bit to get the line breaks and feel I wanted.

    This is by no means a proclamation, just my personal view on the subject. I am certain we all see it differently.

    Although, this might help explain some of the poems and critiques I have posted here.

    I hope you enjoy it.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    is a painting
    made with words.
    It is art.
    As art,
    it is subject to the standard criteria
    and rules or no rules
    of general art, as the case may be.

    Good and bad are relative terms.
    If a piece of poetry expresses
    the intent of the poet,
    if it elicits a response from an individual reading it,
    or if it follows the rules as outlined in the intent,
    it is an important poem.
    If it breaks the rules
    in accordance with the wish of the writer,
    it is a good poem.

    A journey takes you from here to there.
    A good poem does that.
    A dance can have you spinning in one small space
    with no purpose except to feel or see beauty.
    An excellent poem can also do that.

    An effective poem may make you say "Hmm…"
    A great poem may leave you turning in bed
    wondering what it means.

    An awesome poem is an "Aha!" moment.
    Any poem that drags you in
    and makes you read it more than once,
    might be a good poem.
    Any poem that you have to read aloud
    because the words feel good in your mouth,
    is a special poem.

    Any poem that stretches or shakes you
    out of the mundane
    is wonderful poetry.

    A bad poem would be much like a bad dog.
    If it leaves a stinking mess
    wherever it happens to be,
    with no intention but to relieve the originator,
    it is likely bad poetry.

    Submitted on 2005-06-13 22:37:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your poem makes me say "hmmm" so I guess it is an effective poem. Heh. I really love your comparison of a bad poem to a bad dog. I've known quite a few poems exactly like that, leaving a stinking messes wherever they happen to be.

    I would like to see more of what poetry can do, though. Because it really can do so many things, and be so many things. I mean I think this poem could definitely be longer if you wanted it to be. I wonder if your essay went into more detail?

    Anyway, good job.
    | Posted on 2005-06-13 00:00:00 | by Jeremy Six | [ Reply to This ]
      Man nowadays everyone is writing, a poem on poetry. Now usually everyones is the same. But this is quite differant. But I'm not sure I care for this piece.

    But I think you did a good job with the description. YOu may have left some stuff out.. but Bravo to that.

    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      These things get left in our minds and it we don't go write them down, well we get twitches and ticks (time won't allow that we don't). I can imagine the drama and timing one could propose at a reading using this piece. It sounds very interesting and I'm sure it went well.

    I love to write on writing and hope you'll do so again. Analyzing what makes us "aha" only raises their numbers.
    I just keep thinking that consistency is going to become a factor as the odds turn in our favor. Lovely my dear!
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      If I was allowed to say one word about a poem, on this I would say "HALLELUYAH!"
    What a great thing to post on a poetry site, getting into the nitty gritty of WHY we write and the reactions evoked.
    I am very very impressed, this is superb!

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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