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Phoenix Feather

Author: Saaber
ASL Info:    20/m/BD
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101 /99 /26
Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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Phoenix Feather

There was this song I could hear,
And I could not understand it at all,
Still I kept on listening,
Ears pricked, standing as steady as a wall.

The tune was slow,
Yet not at all mournful,
And by searching I found a bird,
Perched atop a branch, nothing but beautiful.

Nothing like this bird
Has ever been seen so closely before,
And I guessed by its appearance
That there was only one, no more.

Such was its elegance,
That I could not help but stare,
And when I walked towards it,
It spread its wings, and in no time, was up in the air.

From the air it looked down on me-
Oh, how its golden feathers were glowing!
The instant I realized what it was it flapped its wings,
And vanished, leaving a gentle breeze blowing.

I looked around and found a feather,
Colour golden and texture so fine,
Then I knew I had a priceless treasure,
And it was mine, all mine!

Submitted on 2005-06-13 23:25:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  lol i like this poem simple and yet elegant i didnt see any deeper thought involved in this but some nice description and a nice ending a nice rhyme scheme so a pretty poem overall :)
| Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by Shadows Life | [ Reply to This ]
  Phoeniz feather.....will you share? LOL. A wonderful poem, beautifully expressed. Good Imagery, I found nothing wrong with it. Now if only you'll share the damn feather. Missing you lil bro. bye

Luv ya,
Uma Soph
| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, nice poem u got there, and i really think that u are great, so anyway, there are no grammar mistakes, no spelling, but mostly we saw it, it could be visualised and that is really good, and that is what i think is tee most important, so anyway, good luck, and i hope ur gonna go better latyer on, and coontinue writing, it helps the emotions come out, and i think and hope that ull continue writing, because ur talented... so anyway, have a nice time, and try to enjoy ur magnificent life...even if u dont like it, something good will come outta it, i promise...
anyway going back to the poem it was original also, never thought of a poem like this before, and im happy to have seen one before, so anyway.....


-=Ur Reader=-
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by Wolfeye_666 | [ Reply to This ]
  lol.. this was fun... it feels like an excerpt from an epic legend of heroes and treasures. great work.
| Posted on 2006-03-02 00:00:00 | by strike three | [ Reply to This ]
  i did read this b4 and i read it now... it neva loses the uniqueness with which it was written. it'z surely your best poem.
| Posted on 2006-01-17 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow that was so good. But you sounded so greedy at the end. Mind toning that down. Just a suggestion. And I noticed your new. Well good luck. I know how that feels we all do. Good luck!
| Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]

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