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    dots Submission Name: i dig 'em BIGdots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 941
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    Description:
       just a little easy read of how i dig 'em . . . . . . .


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    dotsi dig 'em BIGdots
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    i dig 'em BIG
    like the length of my bunny stick

    i dig 'em WIDE
    offers resistance when it comes to the slide

    i dig 'em STRAIGHT
    hits the spot that makes me tremble and shake

    i dig 'em HOT COCO covering
    makes me wana devour 'em

    i dig 'em CREAMY FLOWING over da rim
    giving me ultimate pleasure from within




    Submitted on 2005-06-14 10:06:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      whoa, girly! props to you for writing this piece! this was so modestly obscene (ironic, i know). i like how you capitalized the basic, blunt descriptions that tell exactly what you like. i have a feeling that you will probably get a few negative comments about it being "taboo" or "obscene" or "disgusting", and i'm sure some males will not enjoy this piece, but i sure as h*ll did! rock on, girl! what a write! ^_^

    hugs and c0cks the way you like 'em,
    ~*dark_and_dreary*~
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by dark_and_dreary | [ Reply to This ]
      I've gotta give credit where credit's due. I admire your forwardness, and your bluntness. And I think deep down, there's many of us out there that wouldn't mind one like that *ahems and whistles innocently*

    I love it! And even if you get negative comments, it's only because some people can't handle 'in your face' poetry about sex. You took it to a level where you wanted it, and I commend you girl!

    *hugs a plenty*

    ~Avry~
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
      This flowed really well until the fourth stanza. Then you seemed to have lost the rhythm...

    The piece itself...it was really good...I think that you could have given it a little more depth and more character but other then that...I dig your ability to be bold and say what you want to say.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, especially coming from a female, you don't see that very often. I like your openness to sexuality and you express it pretty clear and to the point. I "dig" the poem a lot, you did a good job, don't see anything wrong with it. I like people who take their poetry to different levels and you did that. Good job
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Sun Spots | [ Reply to This ]
      You won't get negative thoughts from me, I'm too busy thinking about the different items your clever little ditty could be describing...
    Surely you're not telling me that it's a blatant sexy erotic thing?
    Lawdy!
    Tell it like it is, my dear, and more power to you!
    (I lean towards a cup of hot chocolate)

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wooooooo....*high fives and giggles all round* ...I started drooling on the first line ..Congrats to you for going somewhere few do ...I love erotic poetry ...It's pretty ...and *drool*
    I have no bad comments on this ...Aside from the subject matter ...the style and flow was awesome ..wording was fantastic ...all round good peice ...xoxox
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good job! I hope no one will come and censor you... I greatly enjoy your work, you go straight to the point without being trashy and too explicit. I liked this one a lot. Keep'em coming girl!
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by A_xx | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so funny You speaking like me! this was different than I thought it would be but I liked it It was pretty blunt but hey that's what I do so why hate right That was a good write good job Peace Mysterious
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by Mysterious Blue | [ Reply to This ]


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