hmmmmmmm...a bit perplexing, but I like the message/question that you pose. THe age old philosophical question of do we control our own destiny or is everything set in stone :) Nice take on it though :)
I would love to see a book of rhymes with minimalist thoughts like these. Poetry was here before the written word so rhyme and rhythm were devices to help us remember. What better way to recall a quote of profound advice than in the midst of rhyme?
As for content, life can give us pain but we choose to do differently..using motivation and goals, and so much love to share. This is a profound key you've written to compell the thoughts of your readers. Great job! Thanks for sharing. Nan