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    dots Submission Name: don't knowdots

    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
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    dotsdon't knowdots

    I don't know what to do,
    I don't know what to say.
    I know my mind is emty inside,
    I'm aware I'm in today.

    I don't know haw to feel,
    I can't do anything.
    I guess to feel like I'm insane,
    for sane left when it came.

    If you can lead me to a love,
    to my heart and soul,
    then your the one I want inside,
    the one my heart can't control.

    Never to let go at ease,
    feeling like I'm blind.
    All I ever wanted,
    is true love before I die.

    Submitted on 2005-06-14 13:27:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Never to let go at ease,
    feeling like I'm blind.
    All I ever wanted,
    is true love before I die.

    - A sentiment that most humans feel... I think this is very true... I have felt love once and I would love to feel it again... even though it aches more than anything in the world.

    An honest write. Good one.
    | Posted on 2005-10-10 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      "I guess to feel like I'im insane,
    for sane left when it came."

    That's an impressive mental despostion. I like this poem. Chaotic in a way-but I guess to be insane is have chaos. I like the last two lines:
    "All I ever wanted, is true love before I die."
    That's sort of romantic but desperatly depressing.
    This is a good poem. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]

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