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    dots Submission Name: LaughingThroughOurGoldenYearsdots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1016



    Description:
       I was kind of feeling a little ...well out-of-touch aftre The Pedo-Files, with some reality so I decided to write some real hard core fiction this time around...................yucka
    *this is fiction*


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    dotsLaughingThroughOurGoldenYearsdots
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    When I think about you;
    I think of all the things
    I want to do for you,,
    with you,
    to you,
    because of you,
    I know I am loved.
    A kind of Love
    I never knew there was.
    I am so un-worthy of your care.
    I must have done something right
    sometime, somewhere.
    All our joys,
    all our tears.
    As we grow old together.
    Laughing through our golden years
    Yet still I remember.
    That cold december.
    And now here we are
    a lifetime later.
    Still you say you always knew.
    That still makes me laugh,
    I laugh cause I know itís true.
    The day you said I love You,
    The world stopped kicking my chest.
    You gave me your all,
    and all was the absolute best.
    I am.
    Because of you.
    Because of you.
    Thereís nothing I wouldnít do
    to you
    with you
    for you
    anything for you.

    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2005-06-15 06:10:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW! A poem worth putting in my favorites. A lucky person to have found such love to last through the golden years. Very rare this kind of love is found in this fast paced life.
    | Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha! I love the description of this piece "This is fiction". Yeah sure as hell is isnt it! hee hee! But seriously, this is a lovely poem. Wouldnt it be so wonderful to find that certain someone that you could actually feel this way about for more than like 3 months...hahaha! This is a very touching love poem and maybe, just maybe there is that perfect person out there somewhere just waiting! Ummm...? It is amazing though how one person can make such a positive impact on your life and if you are lucky enough to find it, then you are truly blessed. This is such a warm poem! A wonderful read! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-11 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Another nice piece.

    I, too, am curious about the description. Is this fiction because you don't have someone that it's currently true of? Or is it fiction because you don't believe it's possible? I hope it's the former.

    "Still you say you always knew.
    That still makes me laugh,
    I laugh cause I know itís true."

    Chell says things like this to me and I respond the same way. It took me a while to come around to the idea that someone really could love me the way she said she did. There are lot of people out there using the words. In this case, though, it's really true and barring a traffic accident, we will be sitting on that porch sharing these words.

    I hope that this is fiction today and fact tomorrow.

    In any event, it's a great poem.

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      
    This is very different stuff coming from YOU! ha ha..but no, I must commend you on writing this, especially as you hold the view 'love-[censored] it' as I do myself.. ;)
    anyhow, this gave me the image of two elderly people sitting out on the porch having tea, and thinking about all their time together, and that initial love and finding Mrs right and so on..

    'The day you said I love You,
    The world stopped kicking my chest'
    I really like this line.

    I love reading your work, I don't care if its sappy or not. then again, i think you intended this one to be.

    thanks for the read.
    alexis
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      This is powerful because I feel this way about someone. But in reading the first reaction to your poem, I want to read all the other ones too, so that I can see just what type of poetry you are accustomed to writing. It is obviously very different because pennyroyal tea seems to be taken aback! Haha! This was a beautiful poem, especially if someone had it read to them. I wish I can get to that point with someone.
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by NightCrawler | [ Reply to This ]
      AAWWWWWWWWW something sweet from the point of Mike's pen! This is so cute. Hopefully it will come true for you. If it hasn't in 10 years, give me a call.
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm in awe! I just finished reading your journal and was wondering if you could ever believe in a love that makes everything become everything. And then, I read this piece of art.
    Makes me hope that you haven't totally given up - even with the "*this is fiction*" in the description. If your imagination can wrap around this kind of love without any personal experience, then you truly are a master, and I tip my hat to you LT. It was good to get to read another piece from you. Even one as fictional as this...
    Thanks for sharing this bit of fantasy,
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, the power of love, and growing old together. It is beautiful. You show a lot of sensitivity in the piece. Even if it is "fiction."

    It made me look forward to what is to come in my life.

    You will find a love like this. I believe there is someone out there for everyone, that we just need to keep looking. That is the power of love, is it not.

    This was a beautiful piece. You should write more about love. You are very good at it.

    Brightest Blessings,
    Crystal
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm...so this is fiction because no woman has been that for you or because you feel it doesn't exist ? i think this poem is beautiful and i can relate to that feeling, i live with it everyday of my life. nicely written and good flow but of course it has that...everything you write does. and honey...keep the faith...there is some crazy chick out there for you.

    CC
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by C. Starr | [ Reply to This ]


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