Description: I want to dedicate this poem to Matthew (not that that's anything new). I actually came up with the title before the actual poem. I was laying on my bed thinking "Man, I think this just might be the end... he's gone... gone like the wind" Of course previous to him hanging up on me twice one of my best friends and I were talking about the book "Gone with the wind" not that I'd ever read it (I never got the chance to). In the part that reads "So you gave me a quiz?" I mean I feel like just because I called him and wished him happy bithday after we broke up he's testing me to see how much or if I still like him... at least that's what I feel like. *sigh* *silent crying* tell me what you think.
Gone like the wind -------------------------------------------
I'm not sure what I did wrong
Or what someone else did right
But I need you to come talk to me
I really don't want a fight
I know that I'm not perfect
But then again who is
I wished you happy birthday
So you gave me a quiz?
Just make my situation worse
It's not as if I care
The only guy I've ever known
Who would even dare
To want me as his girlfriend
And mean it with his heart
At least I thought now I'm not sure
Because now we're apart
Now you won't even talk to me
I feel somehow I've sinned
I guess you thought I wouldn't mind
That you're gone like the wind
This is a very well written poem! I thought it all flowed well from one line to the next and I could feel the sorrow within your words. I sympathize with you as I have felt like this before and it is an awful feeling! Men can really be insensitive and selfish and hopefully you will remain strong and move on. Find someone who will treat you the way you deserve to be treated and will make you happy. Life is too short to waste time on people like this! Anyway, overall I felt this was a great poem! Take care!
Noticing the date this was written, I hope you are feeling better now and this guy is behind you now!! Best wishes to you!!
so much drama so many boy problems.. just don't know what to say.. you are a very nice person and an extremly good poet.. what more does a guy want?? so i don't know what those problems are about neither do i want to ask questions.. but this piece is thought and planned to end up like an insult but over and over again instead of insulting the person who deserves it, you bring it about on yourself without reckoning.. think about that...
this is a good poem, there are no spelling errors and the flow of the poem is there the whole way through, but i think that the poem would be easier to read if you had it in stanzas like "I'm not sure what I did wrong Or what someone else did right But I need you to come talk to me I really don't want a fight
I know that I'm not perfect But then again who is I wished you happy birthday Meanwhile there's a new fizz Just make my situation worse It's not as if I care" and then so on and so forth, there are a lot of different emotions that come through this poem and i'm sorry you had a bad relationship, just remember that there will be another guy better then the last(unless you have bad taste, but most girls don't)
MMm...the genius of your title wasn't what pulled me to reading this poem, it was that not all the letters were capitalized. Anyway, fadingperson's statement of: "there are no spelling errors" is quite untrue, and I can prove that both of you need to look closer at this: "Now yoyu won't" It's one word, but it's there, and it bugs me. Another thing that fadingwhat'shisface lied to you about: "and the flow of the poem is there the whole way through"
I understand that he/she or both could have felt that and are entitled to their own high opinions but I personally thought this lacked rhythm. The count of the syllables in each verse is very important. As I read it I kept stumbling all over the place because of its randomness. Some verses weren't even needed, no significance at all. You have to understand that poems have structures too. It may be art, and those so called structures could be of your own creation, give the darn thing some backbone. Use commas, capitalizations in the right areas and words, use drama but don't suck it dry of reality.