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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 703
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 974



    Description:
       Lots and lots of emotions going through my head all at once!


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    Anger protrudes from my skin,
    like little razors,
    waiting to protect me from your touch.
    The touch that has sent me,
    into a spiral of uncontrollable emotions.
    Spinning me,
    until the dizziness consumes me,
    makes me sick.
    All I can see is your smile,
    the sly grin,
    that is the reason I am stuck,
    in this whirlpool,
    of pain and suffering.
    I'm engulfed by a black funnel of sadness,
    I can't find my way out,
    for this I loathe you,
    but I love you.
    The spinning is faster now,
    thoughts,
    emotions,
    feelings,
    all prickling my skin.
    Crimson streaks swirl,
    through the black cloud surrounding me.
    Your face,
    sadness,
    your smile,
    anger,
    my blood,
    swirling,
    twirling,
    spinning,
    unstopable,
    carrying me away,
    I'm unable to be saved...




    Submitted on 2005-06-15 16:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like the emotion, it sounds like someone truly in love, but doesn't want to be. Love is uncontrollable and tha's what makes it so mysterious. Your words can clearly be invisioned as someone drowning. Love the effect.
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by Wordsmith | [ Reply to This ]
      Love is the effect. Well written. I felt your love, over indulgents of love, drowning in it, to the point of pain. Well writen.

    always,
    illusions35904
    | Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]


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