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1003 Jefferson Ave.#2


Author: k.o.malley
ASL Info:    28/female/seattle
Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 50 /66 /30
Words: 95
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Every time i move i write something to remind me of the time i spent there and the people i spent it with, this is just one of those pieces. Enjoy


1003 Jefferson Ave.#2



I lived here once,
Then died here twice.
I cried, fought, and screamed,
Then sat with that thought.
I welcomed strangers and turned away old dangers.
I lost my love,
Then found out the cost wasn't all that much; when our time was up.
I gained friends with silver torches,
Still remaining loyal to the old gold ones from way back when.
I shared memories,
I shared what sickens me,
I shared everything, with anyone who had the need.
I lived here with creative minds,
Who inspired mine,
Time after time after time.




Submitted on 2005-06-15 20:01:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well, I enjoyed it, all right, I thought this was quite wonderful!
It's a great idea, too to write a piece about the places you live, and this is a very poignat diary of your obvious growing up and realizing some true values of life.
Excellent work, I can't think of a thing to improve it, well done!
Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-06-15 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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