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    dots Submission Name: Fragile Trinketdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFragile Trinketdots
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    I watch the fragile trinket sway
    between your thin fingers;
    you're trying to hypnotize me,
    and that is so sweet,
    but I'm already in a trance
    brought on by your dark eyes,
    delicious mouth and tousled hair,
    and the trance could be even deeper
    all you have to do is kiss me.




    Submitted on 2004-04-08 23:01:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you're in love and I like your little 'love' poems very much. they're always so sweet.
    | Posted on 2004-04-09 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, lovely write, i enjoyed it though it is short, it works very well! Good show! Keep up the good work, I am a fan of your work, prepare to be stalked! ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-08 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      tis is cool, i like it, it is short and direct and u let the reader get ur point quite quickly. great job.
    | Posted on 2004-04-08 00:00:00 | by Ola | [ Reply to This ]


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