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Submission Name: Optimism dots

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Author:	insipid sky
Elite Ratio:	4.59 - 142/145/28
Words:	108

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Average Vote:	5.0000
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"Don't just call me a pessimist. Try and read between the lines. I can't imagine why you wouldn't welcome any change."

Optimism dots

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Isn't it funny, how
the seconds you wish would quickly pass
turn out to be the memories
that instead of fading will forever last?

Do you laugh as loudly as I do,
when people manage to tear you down,
just when you thought you'd found confidence,
they steal and crush your crown?

Do you find it hard to stop smiling
when you look at the state of the world?
Does it still feel like the sun will shine
after every filthy secret is unfurled?

During times like these,
what is it that you do?
Please share your knowledge with me,
because I have no clue.

Submitted on 2005-06-16 12:00:52 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  A nice bundle of contradictions and questions, and I too, expected a punch line with the optimism, so it was a pleasant surprise to get something different.
In trying to find something helpful, I only came up with the line "steal and crush your crown" if you are using that metaphor, perhaps the line before could relate more to it than simply "confidence"

But I'm only trying to find stuff, I thought it was very good, and nicely different.
Well done

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really cool. Being someone who finds the silver lining in everything I could see how we clash but everythign in this world is relative so I am sure we have our reasons. I am interested to know what inspired this, I think it would make interesting conversation. I have no critque I saw no flaws, great poetry, the ending was well done.

Take care,
-Tom
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
  ooo, i like this one. it's highlighting the paradox of optimism. i think that pessimism and optimism, surrender and hope, helplessness and faith, all go hand-in-hand. you can't have one without the other. the moments in life when we just begin to feel settled in our hope, we see the darker pieces come out into light again. when we are completely ready to give up, a tiny shard of something positive shines at us. it's a rather vicious cycle, but i guess that's what life is really all about. anyway, great write. very self-explanatory. everyone can connect with this. keep it up. ^_^

hugs and wheels that go 'round and 'round,
~*dark_and_dreary*~
| Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by dark_and_dreary | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the little twist you have at the end...you look at the title and think hey this is going to show me how to face all the doubts i have...but thats exactly what you are looking for! very clever...

anyways i just dont understand those optimists...*shrugs*
i guess i NEVER will! LOL
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]

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