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TO MY INTERNET FRIEND


Author: kittycampbel
ASL Info:    23 male uganda
Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 53 /72 /25
Words: 162
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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just to ease your mind and let someone know that though sometimes the internet may cause a bore and be full of untrue friends sometimes, u can get someone to exchange loving and constructive thoughts with.


TO MY INTERNET FRIEND



I have walked to the four corners of the Earth, while sitted
I have framed myself a sinbad the Sailor
With just a mouse
I spread out to look for a perfect match
"Till u came to my life"
Though you seem so far beyond the reach of arms,
The manifestation of u is vivid on my mind
Every time I set out to read your mail,
I see caressing poetry
The best love literature Ever
That needs no Edit
Because it's made to suit my perception

I have read lyrics of the love songs of me
But I too sing, I LOVE U
I never like the thought that someone else will
Ever love u the way I do
I hate the feeling of letting u go
And start it all over again
I wanna let the world round to know that
You were wonderfully created and bountifully created for Me

KC(SAMMY)




Submitted on 2005-06-16 13:56:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Aw, so sweet. If this is based on your own life, than I can relate. Internet relationships can be great! Again, very sweet!
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
  Very very nice, we can all relate to internet love.

I think we fall in love with people's minds on the net, and, of course, on rare occasions, it turns out happy ever after!
Very well written, KC, I love it!

Be Happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  i found the love of my life here at Elite, so i had to check this out! i fell in love with her poetry before i fell in love with her. i'm here to say internet love can work, we've spent time together (although we live 2,000 miles apart), and the angels are at work now trying to find a way for us to be together again, hopefully for good.
my only suggestion would be to spell out "you" instead of using "u." i think it would lend a more serious and credible tone to the poem, you know? it's your call though.
thanks for sharing!
!Cat
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  A very beautiful write Samuel, you've expressed your thoughts of love and friendship so eloquently. If this is truly about YOU, then I am happy for you. You are indeed progressing wonderfully in your ability to write well.
I'm in awe of your chosen words... and expressions. Nicely and wonderfully written.
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! What else can be said besides that? Sammy, you are the most sincere person I have come to meet. I cherish you with all my heart and know that when you speak, words are spoken truthfully. You really did a great job gettin your emotions across. And they touched my heart.

I love this.

Alicia
| Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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