Description: Wrote this in a hurry. At school. No corrections made as of yet. Not denying its repulsiveness. As I've said, wrote it in a hurry..just popped into my head. any help would be greatly appreciated. Thank you. Okay, I just changed a line...a word...from Azrael to the Destroyer of Delights, which I picked up from the book Arabian nights.
Crypto's so crazy, haha, he's kool. Placeing your bets for fights. I never got into this kinda thing. It didn't happen when I was attending school. It's all to common now, at school, in the street, alleys, just about everywhere you look.
Don't be hard on yourself, you have hthe makings for a great writer someday. Your starting out pretty good.
the poems cool. your right about it being repulsive. but the subjects repulsive. it takes a true writer to see the ugliness of life. it does need some nitpicking but only you can make it what it will no doubt be. a seriously cool poem with lots of spunk. i cnt believ i used the spunk. i dont even know if that applies...