Watching Words by Forgiven

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Author:	Forgiven
ASL Info:	27/F/Fl
Elite Ratio:	4.08 - 305/260/57
Words:	80

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	291
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	523

Description:
Think then speak

Watching Words dots

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And it could be
In a moment
Realized
The severity of words
Spoken to the most
Tender of hearts
In turmoil
Or love
Only to destroy
A lifetime of work
On something unseen
But ever present
In the daily routine of life.
This could leave you in ruin
Without a cut to be made
From the inside you would bleed
And the wound would never heal
Until the softness of words
Made it to be
unseen again

Submitted on 2005-06-16 14:44:38 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very powerful and thought provoking. Ppeople sometimes don't realize the effect their words will have on others (sometimes they do and don't think they'll care when they're not angry). Simple yet poignant. Exceptional piece.
J
| Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  You know... most people don't realize the severity of words. they say that sticks and stones may break your bones but words can never hurt you... and the truth is... words hurt something way more important... the soul. and this was really good. but the ending may be tweeked a little because what do u get from a wound... a scar... so its never unseen. but thats just an idea... i still really liked this
Cat
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by dancer06 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the emotional aspect of this and also the concept you are trying to convey a lot... i do think you could work on using diction and be a little more poetic in your speech but i enjoyed this
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by Versifier | [ Reply to This ]
  words can be very powerful and cut and wound deeper than a physical beating. i wrote a poem once about how a poet can cut with her words like a rapier, quick and cold, especially to a tender heart like you speak of. those wounds take a long time to heal because you can't take it back when you've said them.. i do think this might work better with longer lines because it seems a bit choppy, but that's your call. still very good and poignant in its message.
!Cat
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes, think before speaking...very true...just as true as think before doing...kinda the same thing. It all comes down to consequences of your words and actions. You should realize the consequences before you take the actions you take and be content to live with the aftermath, whether it be good or bad. Ya know? Does that make sense? Anyway, yet again reminds me of a quote I heard somewhere, "dont be so concerned with selfish ambitions that you only see what you want and look past what you need". I dunno where I saw that. Anyway, have a good one and keep writin'
| Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Amazing; this was really beautiful.. like it was set out beautifully. This really touched me, you've done such an awesome job and every word makes such an impact. This conveys so clearly how most people don't realise just what words can do to people. I love your concept of all of this. Good work.
| Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
  this is really short..
but so powerful.
So many people.. including myself.. dont think before they speak. and it hurts alot.
sometimes they say ' i love you' too quickly and it ends up so painful. then others just say things that they dont think of and it hurts people with out ever knowing.
words are just so uplifting and painful at the same time. it really can make a life or ruin one-
great write! beautifully done!
jennifer
| Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh so very nice and oh, so very tru... If only everybody knew. You could force it down the throats of few but then who would tell you what to do? And when, oh when, would it all be... done.

Peace, love and Clone High- the best cartoon show EVER made! Later- !SiX!
| Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  From the inside you would bleed
And the wound would never heal

Best lines of the whole poem! Brilliant work!

People don't realize what they say sometimes. Even if they do, they sometimes forget how fragile the person they are speaking to may be. They might mean everything in a good way, but they don't know that the things they say could trigger some pain that will rip someone apart.

Once again, brilliant!

Stefanie
| Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by DeadValentine | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, this almost made me cry, it was such a beautifully written poem. There was absolutely nothing wrong with it, whatsoever. It's like one of those "Sticks and Stones", poem, except words do hurt, but people don't realize that, and it takes a couple of nice words to heal the wound.
Peace and love
-Aya
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]

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