Once Upon A Thunderstorm by nebnim

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Submission Name: Once Upon A Thunderstorm dots

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Author:	nebnim
ASL Info:	21 - Female - My Room
Elite Ratio:	4.01 - 284/405/75
Words:	102

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	245
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Description:
An ode to love

Once Upon A Thunderstorm dots

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I stand in the midnight rain
Half naked
Wet and shivering with a numb cold
Just to feel the warmth of withdrawl

I soak in the midnight rain
Grasping for the world I've found in you
To keep me whole
A shock of contentment in my coil

I run in the midnight rain
To fly among the tears of Angels
To bask in my found-again skin
To touch the ripple

I'll lay in the midnight rain
Just to think of you
Your words floating through me
Just as the rain floats over me
I'm drowning in both of you

Submitted on 2005-06-16 17:00:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Pretty good, I can say I feel ya on this one. I'm in the rain alote myself these days and sometimes just when I think my light of love is riseing I find myself frozen in the snowy ice so brightly brought upon my weary heart. I guess when it comes to love and feelings some of us are just cursed.
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
  What is it about the rain that makes emotions bubble to the surface? Sometimes it's rage, sometimes it's pain, sometime's love. Something about a torrential rain brings them out, exposes them, cleans them and sometimes washes them away.

Another great one, as always,
Steve
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
  This is another beauty, my dear Rachel.

I don't know how many times I have found myself wanting to go out and just let the rain wash me clean. I never do, I guess it is because everyone would think it is foolish to just play in the rain. It saddens me because I have such an urge to do it, but none of the will power. Maybe I should just say f**k you all, and go with my crazy thoughts.

Thank you for another beautiful read.

Brightest Blessings,
Crystal
| Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
  Jeezuz, this is incredibly fine, Rachel.
The images you've invoked here are wonderful, and you seem to build the tension up through the poem, as you stand, shaking off the old past,
soak, taking in the new life force you've found,
run, loving every minute of your new-found life, and
lay in it, living your life with your new-found love.

Excellent choice of metaphor, the rain is so useful in so many ways.
Very very well done,
Be happy
Graeme
| Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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