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Anyone Home?

Author: Toxic Rose
Elite Ratio:    5.82 - 159 /220 /97
Words: 170
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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I love you Hayley... hehe. BFF!!

Anyone Home?

I gingerly walk up the overgrown steps
And search for a long-lost key
I grope for a handle, but it's all in vain
The doorknob is inside, kept.

I realize that the one way to get inside
Is to push on the sturdy door;
A simple method forgotten ages ago
And as I lean, my heart jostles my mind alive.

Will she forgive?
Could she forget?
The painful mem'ries linger-
I recall that one of us died, yet the other lived.


I'm sorry for ignoring you
for avoiding the blatant truth-
You're my best friend, my one and only
And now, I pray, we can start anew.

In the midst of our friendship
An acquaintance stepped forward;
Alas, I was addicted to his allure,
Infatuated with his mere presence.

I hope you'll consent to open the pearled gates-
Please let me back in, I'll prove myself to you-
For though I'm still happily with this young man,
Finally, I've set my priorities straight.

Submitted on 2005-06-16 18:46:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A very straight forward message and quite applicable in many cases I'm sure. I like the apology given and the hopefulness expressed that the friendship will continue.

A nicely written poem.
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  ok ok. very sweet and all. so i'll just get that out of the way cuz deep down i'm a total sap and i hate it. ugh.

i enjoyed the first part before the sguigly wtfe it's called thing. it's very subconcious sounding and unexplained which i like. the second half was not to bad but it was a little to straightforword for my tastes. but this does make me want to go check out some of yer other [censored] lata. so it was attractive enough to gain my attention.
| Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
  well of course o love it... but it was about time! I started writing a reply to this when you gave it to me, but then I thought I would just talk to you about it. Never got the chance. I just noticed how I keep leaving you personal messages but not comments, so I'll try to be productive at some point in here. but before that, just know remember that I know you have to do this stuff to learn. and I want you to learn. So i'm used to waiting while you make your mistakes, and then picking up the pieces. OK, so crap. now for the poem.. I can't do it! there's nothing I can fix with my counting, because that wouls ruin it, or my nitpicky word suggestions! It's not perfect, but neither are we. A fave for sure. You've gotten so much better, it's just amazing. That's all I can say on this one, because you know I culd go on forever. Love you! I'm glad we got back on good terms before we get split up. Because we're going to need each other when everyone else leaves us. We'll always be a year too young. But we've had our depression on that, and we've accepted it, so let's try to get on with it and live our lives as best we can. Wow. Deep moment. I love you!

| Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by sunnyrain | [ Reply to This ]

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