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    dots Submission Name: Close Catch to Helldots
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    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 868
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       Don't know what I was thinking...Just in a religious mood...weird since I haven't been in a church for like 4 years or so.


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    dotsClose Catch to Helldots
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    I'll make my choice to sacrifice,
    if it means I'll lose it all,
    in every way it's worth it,
    to sacrifice it all.

    Just think about it closely,
    this world will fall apart,
    in time we'll need to choose our path,
    right now it's time we start.

    God we trust works up above,
    he cares about us all,
    will you give worthy in his name?
    Or set aside to fall?

    Send below the ground's weakest point,
    to starve and die again,
    so tell us up above,
    was it worth it in the end?

    Or will you choose to site it out?
    because you can't decide,
    fell that earth is your way out,
    run out of where to hide.

    What will happen then?
    when they catch you in disquise?
    You've weakened in your struggle,
    tears form behind your eyes.

    Choose wisely of you words,
    to fit all your sacred needs,
    don't let time destroy this gain,
    your heart will take the lead.




    Submitted on 2005-06-16 19:37:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      k that was great, i loved it alot, i think i have a new favorite poem in my list, and i must tell u not to stop writing u have an unquestionable skill, and you should use it to its maximum extent, i hope this is good feed back to you :D
    obsidian
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I for one, enjoy a good honest write about one's thoughts on God.. and life and death, etc.
    I like this poem as it has a true feeling to it that is genuine. It has a good message and you wrote it well.
    We should all think about our choices in life.. and think "is it worth it in the end?"
    An enjoyable read.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]


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