There is never a position that God will put you in that He doesn't think you can handle....but YOU can always put yourself in a position that you can't handle. So many lose a lack of trust in the Lord due to small prayers not being answered. But in all actuallity....he stands there....by your side....knowing that you can overcome the obstacle that has been placed before you. He is there to keep you from harm....but when you place yourself in a position....you show to Him that you can handle it.....therefore....he will wait for you to overcome your decision. When the time comes and you truly need His help....and He knows you need his help....He will be there.
Just wondering if this is supposed to be damnation? Either way I'll take it that way. The poem was alright, but I think you should change the line that says...
then did god answer but then was too late
it doesn't flow and quite frankly, it doesn't make a whole lot of sense.
i reach out for madness to keep me sane
That line above, that is a wonderful line. I really liked that in this piece. You captured the dark emotion, the pain of seeking answers that don't come until it's too late. What I would like to see more of is people writing about grabbing a hold of their destinies and prevailing, instead of all this dark depressing stuff. Mind you, that's what most of my poetry is about. There are so many poems with this same message in them...you need to find a way to make yours stand out above the rest. The writing itself is not bad at all. Keep it up! Candi
it is a pretty good poem all in all... i think you should cut the lines in half though... i think where you have the commas in each line you should make that a new line... just to help the flow... other than that i really liked it... i still liked it i just found it a little more confusing... it must just be me... enjoy
This was really good; it flowed well in all parts bar one... then did god answer but then was too late but you can fix that by adding : but BY then it was too late. I think this is emotional and it rhymes well without feeling forced and i love some of the imagery this creates. Im pretty sure you meant damnation not damanation... so thats the way i read it. Good work.