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    dots Submission Name: Painting a Picturedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 833
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    Description:
       This was inspired by a friend...I said I had no words and he told me to paint a picture...so yeah here it is.


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    dotsPainting a Picturedots
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    I paint this picture like so many tell me to
    I see it in my head...
    This is the art that I will create

    I am closing my eyes to blank canvas
    To pictures of black and white
    And I look at this with new eyes
    This is the art that I see

    I see a bit of color in a place that I was blind
    I feel...oh my I god I actually feel...this in it self something new
    I was so numb
    beyond pain and bleeding wounds
    and I guess I don't really mind the scars
    as long as you can find them to be part of me

    I see hope...man this is all so strange, I see you, an artsist like myself, and I wonder if you have filled your canvas too...I wonder but I don't care so much
    cause I am happy




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      wonderful depiction of a canvas in your mind. i like the progression of a blank canvas at first then it being filled in with first black and white then at last added some color. then as if some other person you adore is in the same room you are turning to see if they are painting as well. also the added feeling of having hurts that go with the general package sort of a "take me as i am" very straight forwardness it is to be commended. mike :)
    | Posted on 2005-06-17 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa. This is like a big mouthful of words describing everything around you, all that you feel. Great! Its a very good write. Keep it up.

    Love from within
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this alot.But then again lol.i pretty much like anything you write.I guess thats why im stalking you.lol.Umm.. why do you have to be good at poetry.. now i dont have anything to whine about.good puntuation,good description good everything.your such a good brat.I dont like you.Your just tooo goood at poetry.lol/srry anyways this is reallly good.you really underestimate your self.Your really should be an authour or something girlie gal.
    anyway nice to read some more of your work
    Your Fan,
    Alysun-Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]


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