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    dots Submission Name: Days Like Thesedots
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    Author: insipid sky
    Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 142/145/28
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Weather changes moods?

    I don't know how I feel about this one. -sigh- I hardly ever do.


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    dotsDays Like Thesedots
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    The sunshine hides behind the clouds,
    Casting shadows on everything in sight,
    And it's days like these, when the world
    Seems darker, and fills each being with fright.

    There are no cool, calming winds that soothe,
    Any lighthearted emotions felt become opressed by grey,
    The same shade of the barless prison in which we reside,
    Until another day, when inside our coffins we will lay.

    The sky we look up towards as we listen for answers,
    appears to be lifeless, except for the steady drip drops of rain,
    We walk outside, with false hopes and heads held high, and we
    Avoid looking into the puddles, for they are only reflections of pain.

    And it's only on dreary days like these,
    That we hope there will never be a similar one,
    Yes, it's days like these that remind us
    To never take for granted the warm embrace of the sun.




    Submitted on 2005-06-18 00:14:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Insipid, I thought I would read you latest.
    The clouds that create an overcast do in deed darken the day, frighten people for many reasons. When it is getting darker people tend to feel the end is near. Some are afraid of the dark.
    In their coffins their minds may lay, and the grey skies propose that their body may also.
    Dark days seem dead from the start, they seem to be longer also.

    The third stanza was good, you analogized it well. "avoid looking into puddles for it only reflects pain"

    You are right about how we would rather not have another day like this. We all should embrace the sun when possible.

    I just realized that you live in washington to. I'm sure that adds to the puffy grey moisture filled depression up above. I to lived in washington in the past. They have grey skies everyday just about.

    Keep your head up, I'll be checking on you ok.
    -brack
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this surely is a Washington poem... but madame you did it justice... i love the idea of holding onto the sun, but then again... the grey sky isn't so bad... without the grey skys there wouldn't be the green of the washington forests, our beautiful rivers and lakes would be much less majestic... it serves it's purpose... it justifies it's [censored]tiness... I'm glad your emotions are so strong, that means yer living life to it's potentials, and i'm glad yer sharing them with us so we can learn and grow in your world as well... thank you my friend, and i hope to hear from you as well... take care

    Travis
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by Mwa Ha Ha Ha Ha | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this, it was really different to most poems of this type that i've read. I like your thoughts as they are portrayed through this and think it was a beautiful poem. I really relate to the feelings described and love that you've given natural reasons for them. Great work.
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      This was kinda a tongue twister but i liked it.It seemed more like a story though rather than i poem.Anyways i love how when you read your poems you also get this chill.Its kinda creppy but its all good lol.the end of the lines in the poems i found when you red them out loud you were very tongue twisted.I wouldnt say this is your best piece but its not horrible.For once its nice to have a lil something to comment on for you considering most of the time your work is almost perfecto.anyways good work but i would only give this a 4 outa 5
    Your Fan,
    Alysun-Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      Merry Meet Insipid. This is beautiful! I think that weather definately has moods. I really like this poem. I could see the different shades and feel the rain. I feel like this on days. Sometimes even with the sun out. I REALLY like the end!:

    Yes, its days like thesethat remind us
    To never take for granted the warm embrace of the sun.

    Great work Insipid! Blessed Be Andrea
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]



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