Tomorrow will be OKay, okay? -------------------------------------------
I'm alMOSTLY here. Up and outSTANDING effort to STOP here&& THERE.
I can't outSTAND this EMOTIONal FRENZY. But I maybe might be alMOST NOTso alRIGHT.
Delete
Delete
Delete
love
cut
die
cut
love
love
carve
die
feel
love
cut
love
fuck
die
love
fuck
hate
love
love
love
I canHARDLY feel ANYTHING CLEARly
clearLY I am alRIGHT?.?.?
I know that tomorrow I will be okay, but today the gun is AGAINst my throat.
I'll be OKay
and DECENT
is amazing
for TODAY I felt aLONELY silence RECITED.
Life is obsCURE ME from this INDIFFERENT lovehate EMOTIONal outBREAK MY HEART MY EYES in your going to be OKAY. okay?
O-K.
This is my PATTERN to breakOUT of this cycle.
Tomorrow will be OKAY
Too many are not OKAY
My Days are NOT alRIGHT? alright? Alright.
No one knows about what I never tell anyONE&& I wanted to say it todayesterday's night...
Woah, this is a great style and you bring it alive so well. Anguish fighting hope is a classic battle and I love the way you've used simplicity and plain English to give so much... vibrance (i think thats the word I want) to this. 'love cut die cut love' That whole pattern will keep people riveted and as commented before, virtually at the edge of their seat to see your battle. The capitalism just brings in a whole hidden angle which is what I meant by plain English. A whole new poem within one. Loving it! Hannah
I wrote something in a notebook almost identical to the "love cut die" thing. Wow...it's freaking me out how similar it was. Haha. But, I did understand the part about being okay tomorrow but right now "the gun is against my throat" I enjoyed this rhythm. Great write.
maybe jesus did have his secrets... interesting idea...
love cut die fcuk... thats pretty hardout that bit... im like please dont be cutting you but thats a whole nother issue...
i love how you play with words... capitalising parts of words to make them say different things and mean completely different things... i really do wanna be like you when i grow up...
the line 'i can hardly feel anything clearly' is an amazing line as it a) admits your feeling completely screwed and dunno what the hell is going on but b) its such a help me line... i dunno... i just really liked it...
lonely silence recited... god thats SO gotta suck... lonely silence is bad enough without it being recited... being shown off that it is known in its entirety, that it is so familiar... that breaks me.
and tomorrow will be okay and while it sounds like okay is a good thing i think okay is so mediocre... i hope tomorrow is brilliant... really...
Submission Name: Tomorrow will be OKay, okay?
