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    dots Submission Name: waste of fleshdots
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    Author: shes automatic
    ASL Info:    17/f/ky
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 47/62/13
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 252
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       background info? i was still in love with my boyfriend when he was no longer feeling things for me...heh. um yeah, i'm quite over it now...but i wrote it (2 years ago) when i was most certainly aching the most.
    please be kind. :D


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    dotswaste of fleshdots
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    Don't ask.
    Don't ever ask.
    There's nothing behind you but lies.

    Hold me.
    Hold me tighter, longer.
    It suffices to your untruths.

    I have nothing to say.
    You don't either.
    We go unnoticed and unanswered.

    Your eyes will tell me.
    You seem different.
    You've changed, and left me here alone.

    I just want to tell you what you've done.
    Nothing to keep me company, except these blaring headphones.
    Happy now?

    Happy with your lies.
    Hold me, say you love me.
    Who's the luckier one now?

    I'll never be blunt with you.
    Too timid.
    I'm scared.

    Are you?
    Why not?
    You do your fucking waltz.

    Walk through these halls and hug me.
    Talk to me like you know someone.
    You don't fucking know me.

    You
    Don't
    Know
    Me

    This is for you. God damn I don't feel alive. You know what you did, I know what you did. But I'm too scared. So walk away and leave me be. Because you treat me like a disease.




    Submitted on 2005-06-18 23:09:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow that hostile but I knwo how it feels to love but not be loved I can really relate I'm glad u got your anger out omn paper then on something else I've never een u thios pissed before and that's saying alot
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this was great
    Very nice format in the start
    A tower of emotion was built by reading this
    Still standing tall at the end
    I am a bit shaky on the ending though
    Possibly split it up
    Maybe it was supposed to be like that
    Great write anyhow
    Best of Luck-
    Big Bill
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love pieces like this because the reader doesn't have to "understand" or "feel" it personally to feel the pain and heart break. This is real, anger, heartbreak. :( Sad too. But it's good to write these things down, get them out you know? I love this part, "Your eyes will tell me. You seem different. You've changed, and left me here alone." I think eyes can tell anything. It can really tell if someone has changed. It shows heartbreak, love, passion, and sadness. I once heard a quote that said "People change and forget to tell each other." That's what this reminded me of. Great job. I'm glad you got this off your chest. Feels better doesn't it? *Hugs* <3

    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]



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