Don't ever ask.
There's nothing behind you but lies.
Hold me tighter, longer.
It suffices to your untruths.
I have nothing to say.
You don't either.
We go unnoticed and unanswered.
Your eyes will tell me.
You seem different.
You've changed, and left me here alone.
I just want to tell you what you've done.
Nothing to keep me company, except these blaring headphones.
Happy with your lies.
Hold me, say you love me.
Who's the luckier one now?
I'll never be blunt with you.
You do your fucking waltz.
Walk through these halls and hug me.
Talk to me like you know someone.
You don't fucking know me.
This is for you. God damn I don't feel alive. You know what you did, I know what you did. But I'm too scared. So walk away and leave me be. Because you treat me like a disease.
| Wow that hostile but I knwo how it feels to love but not be loved I can really relate I'm glad u got your anger out omn paper then on something else I've never een u thios pissed before and that's saying alot||| Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ] || Wow, this was great|
Very nice format in the start
A tower of emotion was built by reading this
Still standing tall at the end
I am a bit shaky on the ending though
Possibly split it up
Maybe it was supposed to be like that
Great write anyhow
Best of Luck-
|| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ] || I love pieces like this because the reader doesn't have to "understand" or "feel" it personally to feel the pain and heart break. This is real, anger, heartbreak. :( Sad too. But it's good to write these things down, get them out you know? I love this part, "Your eyes will tell me. You seem different. You've changed, and left me here alone." I think eyes can tell anything. It can really tell if someone has changed. It shows heartbreak, love, passion, and sadness. I once heard a quote that said "People change and forget to tell each other." That's what this reminded me of. Great job. I'm glad you got this off your chest. Feels better doesn't it? *Hugs* <3 |
|| Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ] |