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i'm sorry

Author: fallingingreen
ASL Info:    18/f/missouri
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just tired and i haven't written anything in a long time.. i was reading your poems again..

i'm sorry

pathetic attempts at pouring my heart out to you
leave me determined to stop the world
in an earthquake of shakes
leading to a breakdown of minds
think me away from here
to wherever you want me to be
your words strike me to wonder
what do you really mean-
really feel
people start to get the idea
did i break you?
all i want is to be your everything..
you are already mine..
perfect in everyway..
and i know you say i am..
but words mean more than you think-
even on paper

Submitted on 2005-06-19 10:48:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ive come to the conclussion.. guys suck ha.. yes.. love in any shape or way is love and it cant b changed but love that is spoken has a sweeter taste then love that is given with out words..<3 ash
| Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  Rhiannon, maybe this won't mean much, I mean in all reality we don't know eachother. Let me tell you what I do know about you though...

You are the quiet confusion that drives him mad with passion
A question that cannot be answered but cannot be avoided.
You are his gravity.
Your eyes are deeper than any ocean,
Your mind is full of poetic beauty, you want to let it out, but the worlds not ready yet, just wait.
You have more heart than most anyone I have ever met.
You want so badly to be loved that you don't realize you already are.
I know your voice is soft and sweet, and I'd bet you sing in the shower
The brightest part of the sunny california day is when you smile.
I hope he knows...
You are the best thing about the west coast.

Smile Rhiannon, you are exactly who you are supposed to be...

I hope this helps...
Much Love
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]

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