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Unconditionally


Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
ASL Info:    18/f
Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 122 /151 /29
Words: 27
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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Unconditionally




He has no idea
that I want to
scream,
punch,
kick,
scratch,
spit,
slap,
until he's a different person,
a person I can love.
Unconditionally.




Submitted on 2005-06-19 10:58:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  all of this is amazing.

"He has no idea
that I want to
scream,
punch,
kick,
scratch,
spit,
slap,
until he's a different person,
a person I can love.
Unconditionally."

one sentence holds so much emotion.
straight and to the point.. and wonderful, in an angry yet loving kind of way. but you can't change a person to love them, as much as you want to.. they will always be that person and you have to love them for who they are.. not who you want them to be. just my thoughts. awesome job.
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by fallingingreen | [ Reply to This ]
  Ta ha and tee hee...I like this... so much anger and agression in just a few short and simple words.. I'm applauding you.. but you can't hear me so clap for yourself :). I like this.. I like short and sweet poems... they're harder to write(at least for me) and give more for less.
-Alli
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
  It's so uberly short, and so uberly professional, that it makes me feel so great to be on this website. You are so incredibly good, and you said it in such a short, but great way, and great eloquence. It held so much power, and so much emotion, and it really amazes me because it was so short, and like wow, and it was so good, and it was like free-falling.
Peace and love,
-Aya
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. I can totally relate! Except I have temporarily given up on my "him". Anyway. This was very good. Short, but to the point. I have no criticism.
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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