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Rat Haikus!


Author: Kalidoscopeeyes
ASL Info:    18/f
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Words: 47
Class/Type: Haiku /Misc
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So I work at a research lab that uses rats to research the roles of different brain regions in such behaviors as decision making and fear conditioning. And how that functioning differs when the rat has cognitively declined due to normal aging and during drug addiction.

And right now, I can't do much at the lab because I have to take a safety class first, so I took a stab at writing haikus.

I've never written any haikus before.


Rat Haikus!




They are my babies,
these grey and white rats of mine.
I think I like them.

~*~

First week of summer,
Sitting around at the lab
Until the last week.

~*~

Penetrate their brains,
ask them about decisions,
pet them in between.




Submitted on 2005-06-19 11:09:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the last one ^.^ Only because its so cruel... I know that sounds odd... I think you did an ok job writing these... ((Despite the fact that I despise haikus myself tee hee)) and I'm sure that your interesting line of work makes for some interesting observations.
keep writing.
-Alli
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Childoutspoken | [ Reply to This ]
  sounds like you have an interesting job. much better than mine.. a thouasnd times better.
i like the last haiku..
haiku's are hard to critique, they are short and usually to the point.. so i've got nothing else.
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by fallingingreen | [ Reply to This ]
  Welcome to the wonderful world of haikus! Veru nice for your first go at it, and linking the three was good as well.
I really liked the last one, couldn't tell whether you were being really nice or just cynical.
Haikus Rule!
Be Happy
Graeme
| Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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