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    dots Submission Name: Becky & Lisadots
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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 300
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Umm its a story of two best friends who are scared to death of high school and marrige and everything they shouldnt be scared of, and realize as they're walking through the streets at night and the humidity is racing them home that they're only 14 and that they have the rest of their lives for thinking like this..but they still think crazie thoughts like this everyday. no matter what. And return to the tennis court at night no longer at day. I love you lisa!!

    ~Becky!::ding::~


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    dotsBecky & Lisadots
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    We sat in a tennis court,
    And still felt life’s complications.

    We colored the sky with our problems,
    And yet the paint still remained mixed.

    We swam fully dressed,
    And still looked as naked as our futures seemed.

    We sweat furiously into the day,
    And yet the sun seemed colder than ever.

    We finally found our selves,
    And still the thought of growing older sat hollow.

    We told of our deepest thoughts,
    And yet thinking held the strongest purpose ever.

    We have created the past, present, and the future,
    And still we can’t decide the simplest thing.

    We know the most unsettling fact of death,
    And we still continue to plan the rest of out lives.




    Submitted on 2005-06-19 17:24:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We swam fully dressed,
    And still looked as naked as our futures seemed.

    i love this line!
    It rings true to myself and my good friends. thanks for giving me a smile

    ~lauren
    | Posted on 2006-04-19 00:00:00 | by blahblahgurl | [ Reply to This ]
      are you and lisa dating?

    i loved the poem
    it seemed to capture the essence of life
    and if your bi or gay this is real comfort
    keep up the good work
    kristen
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was very well done
    A two line stanza form
    Creative at least
    Some good parts
    But it seems more like something you would put in prose, or could turn into that.
    The title makes it that way I guess lol
    Hopefully you change it
    But that's just me =P
    Big Bill-
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      We'll make it. And if that was all they would let me post in a comment believe me it would have the dramatic effect I'm looking for. I just know we'll get there, I refuse to give up on my dreams and if he loves me he'll help me make them come true. Love you Becky! Forever your Lisa.

    Blessed Be!::ding::
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]



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