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    dots Submission Name: Go Fix Yourselfdots

    Author: RandiKae
    ASL Info:    17/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 125/138/34
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGo Fix Yourselfdots

    You try to stand out
    but your nothing in a crowd
    Ive tried to fix you once
    But now i hope you stay down.

    Your hollow eyes
    were never meant to see
    Theres something in you
    That i never want to be.

    Forever alone in your heart
    No-one to love you now
    You threw them all away
    No-one needs you any how.

    Submitted on 2005-06-19 17:26:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      quite a powerful piece, a clean slice of his throat,lol

    Its so true u can love and love and love and some people just won't see it and your poem potray this very well,then at a cetain point,angry will set in. Though my advice is this, they way you end a relationship speaks the truth of who you truely are,never drop you character to their level.

    Your poem does need a more poetic way of saying this,yes it does work in this format,but you can smash your point through with a poetic from,rather than th raw feeling format you have choosen.
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I thin its a poem about how this person wanted to be in the in crowd, so he/she dropped all of her his/her friends, and now he's a soulles drone, because no one loves him, and they only like him because now he is popular, and you tried to bring him back, but he wouldn't come with you, and now you don't want him anymore. That's what I got out of it, and I think that it's nicely written.
    Peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...that was lots of emotion for such a shot peom. I like it...sorry i havent got to talk to you i a long time...but this poem is teh [censored] for how short it is...good poem and keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by InYuco Katan | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that is a pretty cutting poem. You never seem to have a problem making your words powerful and to the point. I really like that. I just hope you aren't talking about me. (Oh god tell me I don't have a dead stare) Although I have a feeling i know who you're talking about.
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]

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