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    dots Submission Name: Come Arounddots

    Author: RandiKae
    ASL Info:    17/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 125/138/34
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       About my mother who refuses to contact me or have a part in my life.....you will read the rest.....

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    dotsCome Arounddots

    Lying in my grave,
    Looking up toward you,
    It's funny how you came around,
    Now there's nothing you can do.

    Why did it take so long, Mother,
    For you to see the truth,
    Was it so hard to tell,
    That all I needed was you?

    Standing alone,
    Looking down on me,
    Cold, dark, lonely eyes,
    Cursed is how you'll forever be.

    You didnt understand, Mother,
    Now at 16 I'm gone,
    You stole my life away,

    Submitted on 2005-06-19 17:30:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your poem is straight from the truth, Inknow, My momther left and has totally ignore me and my sisters and brothers,lucky for me i was never close to her,so With her,it was like being born without her. once I became and could control my life, i was finally free and made life the way I wanted it to be.

    This was a good wite,becuase it was honest,though it was sad and I am sorry you have to go through this,big hug
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely poem, kinda ironic how I just wrote a poem about a Dad not being around a daughter. I think this poem is way better than mine however, because yours had anger and even more emotion. Probably because it was first person and not third. Don't change a thing, I love it. 5/5
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this was so sad. I think I'm about to cry, because this poem hits a little too close to home, though I'm not you know...dead. It's a very amazing poem, and I really loved, it, and you should be very proud that your poem could be so hard hitting as someone to leash out an emotional outbreak from reading it. It is a very nicely written, and wonderfully themed poem. Great and awesome job.
    Peace and love,
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      well hey there lady, let me tell you that i know my true mother very little, and when she comes around she only wants something, kind of like a spur of the moment type thing. she has made promises upon promises and they never, ever hold true. now since i'm the Marine and the best one out of the family, she suddenly wants in...well why the hell should I. there is a point to this...lol, and it is that your life is not stolen and you will recover very well from this as time passes...trust me. to hear such dismal tones from such a young person...hurts. it will get better, i can promise you that. take care of yourself.

    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the poem...it is sad, and full of hate at the sametime...im sorry this is so short...i run out of [censored] to say...because i think that every poem is perfect...how can you say someones feelings are wrong? well nice poem...i love your work...and i hope to get somemore of mine up soon...and i would like to see you post on them...as soon as i make sommore...love ya
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by InYuco Katan | [ Reply to This ]
      it's sad for me to say that those words ring pretty true. It's [censored] pathetic that so many people can emphathize. I'm sorry I wasn't able to help you more, I've failed in that regard. When it comes to you I've failed in a lot of things. It was a great poem, again short. Keep up the good work, I'm about to add some stuff too.
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
      It's sad when one conflict causes family members to stop communicating...She should read this.. writing is a good way to express emotions such as these. Somoene needs to break the barrier- you may need one another in the future
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]

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