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    dots Submission Name: standdots

    Author: laniejane
    ASL Info:    26
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 53/67/36
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 634
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    you found my wounds
    and took care of my sorrows
    but the question still lingers
    will you be here tommorow?
    i need to know
    for peace of mind
    is our love enough to stand
    the test of time?
    you are so special to me
    you're in my hopes and dreams
    i would do anything for you
    we make a perfect team
    my passion, my love
    grows stronger each day
    will you stand by me?
    be as it may

    Submitted on 2005-06-19 19:09:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this. it seemed simple but effective.
    it was something that alot of people can realate to..
    the only thing i might change is here..

    "you are very special to me"

    the very threw it off i think.. it was something around there that just made the flow get off.
    other then that. i think you did a very good job

    great write!
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you are right, that line does kinda disrupt the flow, so im changing it. :) thanx for the comment and suggestion!
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem.It's like many that I have written myself.I know how it feels to feel like that.So,yah.I think that the end could use be better...Idk...
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]

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