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    dots Submission Name: Shoe Beside the Shoredots
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    Author: little_theif
    ASL Info:    20/F/Halifax
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 42/58/26
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 243
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Whenever some profile or whatever has a space for location I always say I live in a shoe by the sea. Thought I'd write a poem about it.


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    dotsShoe Beside the Shoredots
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    One night I dreamt
    Of a shoe beside the shore
    Empty and abandoned
    Alone in the windy night
    I crept closer.

    As I approach I see
    It's not just a shoe but a home
    Empty and alone
    In this windy summers night
    I try the knob

    I find it unlocked
    I step inside and light the fire
    Small and warm
    A house for only one
    For me

    The wind picks up
    My shoe is lifted and carried
    Floating in the storm
    Away to Oz I surely am
    Or maybe not

    The shoe drops
    With the sound of the splash
    I fall against the wall
    Sailing through monstrous waves
    Thrown away from shore

    The storm calms
    Tantrum subsided I climb outside
    I look all around
    No land in sight for months and years
    I'm lost at sea

    For days for weeks
    I live on fish and weed and sun
    In my little shoe
    My shoe for only one
    For me

    At long last
    I see the long line of coast
    A sea side town
    My shoe drifts towards shore
    A seagull says hello

    I reach the beach
    Drift up onto the soft white sand
    I wander into town
    For food, for drink, to say hello
    At night I will return

    To the shoe beside the shore




    Submitted on 2005-06-19 21:15:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Imaginative. Creative. I love it. But if there's a deeper meaning, I definitely missed it.

    The tone wasn't really happy or melancholy, definitely a misc poem. Very good nonetheless.

    I can't really think of any suggestions (sorry), but I guess that's okay since you're looking for thoughts.

    I like how you start it out with "At night I dreamt" and near the end you say "At night I will return." That's a really good touch, a good way of wrapping the story together.

    Cheers.
    | Posted on 2005-06-19 00:00:00 | by JKPS613 | [ Reply to This ]



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