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    dots Submission Name: The Chairdots
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    Author: SHRINKSDR
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 476/375/39
    Words: 346
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       :This could be called a day in the life"


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    dotsThe Chairdots
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    The Chair

    The Chair

    Long trip in.
    Stop and go Traffic.
    Stop and go drizzle.

    My Office door,
    Announces Psychotherapist!
    Ames chair,
    Traditional
    consulting room fare!
    It waits for me each morning.
    It’s white, soft leather seat,
    Envelopes, caresses my hard bony seat.

    The Chair has taken many journeys.
    It has held me,
    Supported me,
    Through calm and stormy seas.

    Most Journeys’ begin,
    Hesitantly, apprehensively,
    But always bravely.

    If ended early
    The journey may be
    Forever lost!
    A responsibility felt!
    Lives entrusted to my hands.

    Facilitate that journey
    Move it forward.
    Each trip unique;
    Fingerprints of the soul.

    I, an observer, guide and navigator!
    Columbus in uncharted waters.
    Must pick up the currents,
    Catch the prevailing winds –
    Let the canvas billow and pull.

    I know, these currents,
    These winds, these waters.
    I once journeyed here myself.

    Some ships are sturdy,
    Plumb deeper waters
    Unafraid of denizens below.

    Others begin shallow.
    Some stay the coastline.
    Yet all need to sail,
    Take their journey.
    Whether deep or shallow
    Each tries to find their way.

    Ships bell has just struck nine
    Last goodnight, as
    Last person leaves.

    I rise from the chair, Stretch.
    Faces, voices
    Swirl around me - through me.
    Slowly ebb and fade.

    I am at peace.

    First, I did no harm!

    There were those I bought some comfort to.
    Others helped see themselves,
    Their Journey, more clearly –
    Yet some, I simply listened to,
    And it was enough.

    For some –
    A small change.
    Yet Small changes
    Become large changes
    In the quality of a life!

    I pray:
    Thank you for this day.
    Thank you for this work,
    I love and cherish so much.

    The chair will wait for me tomorrow.
    For now, the office door closes.
    I am homeward bound.

    STEVEN D. ROBLES




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      This is a great poem! Very nice expression of your profession! This is so well written and well thought out! I can relate to this in a way as I am an RN and I worked with people with various mental illness for a few years, in various degrees of intensity. The mind is truly fascinating isn't it? I almost went to college for psych as a major but I love nursing and it took over. However I did take many psych classes and seminars and enjoyed them so much that I worked as a psych nurse for a few years! You have a wonderful profession and this poem is a great writing! Thanks for sharing! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-07-30 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this... and feel I know the author a bit better by doing so. Your work sounds fulfilling and most interesting. Thanks for sharing it with us. The poem subject being the chair was quite clever and very well written. I take it you work on a ship?
    I love the client(?) metaphors used.. each description seems to fit so perfectly.

    A shrink doctor huh? Do you have any openings?

    Wonderful write.. great job on this.

    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this. I read this because you mentioned it when you reviewed my poem empathy (which was probably the intent of mentioning it lets face it ). I loved the poem and the decriptions, i lived it with you being a trainee counsellor myself :). I am pushed for time now but will be back to re read because it deserves more readint than I cab giv eit right now,...i shall return. Keep upo the good work on both accounts.
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa! D*mn, I really - really like this. I dont know that there is any one line to pick out - cause it all just is great and flows so well and I can see you in that chair, each guest you receive, the long sigh at the end of the day and the knowing that you will be occupying that chair tomorrow...
    And you said it all so well with the following:
    "There were those I bought some comfort to,
    Others helped see themselves
    Their Journey more clearly –
    Yet some, I simply listened to,
    And it was enough.
    For some –
    some small change.
    Yet Small change makes large change
    In the quality of a life!"
    That, my friend, says it all
    Excellent, thank you for recommending :)
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-01 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      allright I love it when I get these type the first try. you have so much here I dont know where to begin :) I'll just do my usual. so hang back while the bi polar nut looks and digs into the therapist's poem. {language expression} " My Office door, Announces Psychotherapist!"
    "Envelopes, caresses my hard bony seat." this is more of a listing of terms or phrases of expression I like "Through calm and stormy seas." like it "I set my mind to the day’s Journey of drama’s, Comedies, and Tragedies."
    "Fingerprints of the soul." that was off the hook. the entire stanza that begins with "I, an observer, guide and navigator!" and ends with "I once journeyed here myself." (this is going on my favorites when im done) ok the entire stanza after that as well and the one after that ha ha you have alot let's move on. {chronology} the time flow is great with solid and moving reflective thoughts in the second to the last stanza which adds to the poem. It begins driving to work and end leaving from work. I'm going to jump to the analysis but I will add elements throughout {analysis/imageries} (mostly line by line) vs 1-3 in these lines alone you have: the appearance of the sky, the mood you are in, the traffic conditions, what you are drinking, and the weather. I must add. I love the stop and go drizzle. vs 4-11 I like the Announces Psychotherapist! the desciption of the chair and you sitting in it all very real and vivid events I can see. v 12 the chair taking journeys it can be just you sitting in your chair going through the events also can be a figure of speech for you and your profession ({opinion}) I think they should make a tv show the chair. v 14 the calm and stormy seas wonderful illustration of easy/difficult times
    or good/bad events. sometimes it's a mixture of both, yes? v 15-16 the setting the mind or preparing for what is to come. I like the journey that is a warm and generous way to describe dealing with people. kudos for the drama, comedies, and tragedies that was a dimensional leap into another paradigm of the theater, you aren't bound but a free writer. it's was a nice change a pulling out from one aspect to another, keeps the reader on their toes. vs 17-20 these lines are emotional and lead up to the heartfelt line v 21 "A responsibility felt! " vs 22-24 move on forward the aim to progress into the unknown. v 25 the trip unique: your genuine attitude and respect for the people you deal with awesome! and it has a special relationship to the next immortal line v 27 my favorite line "fingerprints of the soul" v 28 you watch, you suggest, you work at finding the problems. there are many ways to view that line alone. v 29 columbus also deserves a special notation it is the feeling of a new journey maybe some danger to it but nevertheless a journey you want to make. v 30-34 (enter into a deeper aspect from here on.) the channels at least 4 meanings in my mind a channel is not only a small body of water connects to larger bodies if it was you would have said a strait. it leaves it open to more meanings very well done. 1st meaning I get the channel is moving in between the various issues. 2nd also it can be a momentary relief. 3rd it can be a treacherous dealing because of the ship's depth. 4th if the seas are the unconscious the channel would be closer to the land perhaps the bringing together of more plain issues. also the picking up the currents the motivational forces that help propel the ship others would be the wind as you have mentioned and skill of the captain. for all these forces would not help much in progress if there where no captain present, wouldnt you agree? another great line my second favorite v 35 "I once journeyed here myself." that was great and honest. my take is that you have issues too you are human as well it is a reaching out saying im not perfect. ({another opinion}) I wish I could have a therapist like you. :) v 36 "some ships are sturdy" now this is one is a little tough for me im guessing its the defense mechanism perhaps.. of course you not a pirate trying to blast into the ship ha ha. perhaps it means a more seaworthy craft or person who is strong and able to withstand the punishments of life but im reaching there. v 37 plum deeper waters I take a view of the waters being the subconscious or deep issues also I infer at the surface of the water being calm or rough would be the day to day emotions that are shown and persona projected be it real or aa social mask. v 38 "Unafraid of denizens below" I have to say that my own monsters of the deep I am a little scared of but in the sense of facing them maybe I would be bold who knows. of course denizen could be something that one thinks is a monster but it is a seal ha ha. v 39 I take that line as beginning with small problems perhaps one who needs to be taken out slowly. v 40 staying on the coastline in my eyes those are people who dont want to venture out to far into themselves they want the comfortabilty to step on land anytime. v 41 no matter what they need guidance of some sort, I say guidance because the sail moves and directs the wind in ways to propel the ship but you still need the wind. 42-44 the next lines no matter how they approach they are finding their way nevertheless. im going to stop here :) that was alot to chew on. wonderful work, im glad I found it!
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good. When people write long poems, most of the time they end up going off track, but you stayed on it, and it was good. With every stanza I read, it seemed the emotions were getting deeper and deeper. The way you described your job was different then a lot of people would have written it, and thats good. You're style of writing is unique and different...and I like it
    Good job!
    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2005-07-02 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a great piece! I love mixing things up and it worked well with the tone and thoughts in this piece.
    I imagine being a psychotherapist is tough because you're always taking in people's mostly negative energy and pain. I too liked the ship references and to me, it shows that you are one of the caring therapists. (I think I've had all the one's that aren't! I finally started meditation and self therapy and my whole life has changed! No offense!)
    Great job!
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-06-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a very witty poem. You told the perspective of the Psychotherapist in a clearly clever way. I would never think of it that way. I thought it was very intriguing.

    Your rhyming was great also (Though I'm not very good when it comes to rhyming... so I guess my opinion doesn't matter much. :p) I liked how you implicated different styles, it made the poem even more enticing. :)

    -Segniust
    | Posted on 2005-06-24 00:00:00 | by Segniust | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really nice. When I first pulled it up, they length looked a bit intimidating, but as I read it, it didn't feel long at all.

    I know very little about the world of a Psychotherapist, so I found your poem educational as well as entertaining. In particular, I liked the entire ship connection.

    "Some ships are sturdy
    Plumb deeper waters
    Unafraid of denizens below
    Others begin shallow.
    Some stay the coastline.
    Yet all need to sail, "

    Good stuff,
    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      Good Lord, have you written a book or something, your stuff is Pro! That was just beautiful, you made something so simple so inspiring! It's gives an informative point-of-view, that's incredible! You should put more of you stuff up, Because i want to read more of yuor stuff!
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Indelible_ink | [ Reply to This ]
      A very nice work. I think I would call it prose, maybe even rework it a small bit to eliminate the rhyming where it is. I found that my mind kept looking for the rhymes-almost like a game.

    To me, rhyming shows a bit of time spent on creating an emotion/story, where as prose is an emotion/story so intense it demands that you put pen to paper and hold on.

    Punctuation is a tough call in poetry, when to use, when not to use. and what to use are not rules set in stone, but I find it my rule of thumb to make sure I have used punctuation whenever I want my readers to stop, and think what I have just said.
    An example:

    You wrote:

    "Ships bell has just struck nine
    All Debark secure the lines"

    Might be easier to read if punctuated like so:

    Ships bell has just struck nine.
    All Debark! Secure the lines!

    Just a small suggestion. I guess I'm trying to figure out why you would wait so long to try you hand at poetry, because prose of rhyme, you are good.

    -Chell-

    P.S. I'm glad you see your job the way you do. I've always wanted to work in the field of psychology, (can't now) and wondered how much of every day follows you home at night. The sailing concept in beautiful. Keep sharing, I'll keep reading...
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]


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