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    dots Submission Name: Repeatdots
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    Author: Von Django
    ASL Info:    32/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 119/148/32
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 841
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 227



    Description:
       A beautiful new day.....


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    dotsRepeatdots
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    Eyes hide me under a glassy stare
    Lungs breathe recycled air
    Ribs and tired meat
    Crawl out from under the sheets
    Shades of grey
    A new coma, everyday
    I am asleep, I am weak
    Repeat




    Submitted on 2005-06-20 10:13:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What's this? You in a coma or what is going on here? Or is this just every day life for you? Man, I'm lost. I didn't know that some poetry could be so confusing! Not that I am downing your work but this is all new to me.

    I'll sit for a while and try to figure it out.

    Dialo
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by Xtremebiter | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay this is a pretty pessimistic way of looking at life, but I guess we all have times when the world has dulled to monochromatic tone and there doesn't seem like much to get out of bed for, except that it's expected of us. Here's to hoping that you find rainbows of color in your life soon to brighten the palate.
    jan
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      So negative... I shouldn't say anything tho cuz I can be quite the pessimist as well.. but no world should be like this if it is think of a way to brighten it up. but still there are days where I think I am weak, not able to to press on etheir.
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]


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