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    dots Submission Name: Granddots
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    Author: Cindergarden1
    ASL Info:    18 Male Sweden
    Elite Ratio:    4.69 - 43/58/17
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Satire
    Total Views: 689
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1260



    Description:
       Wrote this song for my sister whose trying to elbow her way into the music world.


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    dotsGranddots
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    Get your wallet, get in style
    Pay your surgeon for the smile
    Get connected, get in touch
    Up a size, it's not too much
    Oh, in the end
    We all pretend

    Bleach your teeth and dye your hair
    You're not young, but who's to care?
    Tighten up and let it go
    20 pounds, yeah, who's to know?
    'cause in the end
    We all pretend

    that we're all grand
    that we're all stars
    Get yourself a lover
    Get on this week's cover
    You are grand
    Yeah, you're a star

    Call your mother, call the press
    Tell the viewers you've been blessed
    Tell 'em 'bout your new career
    Punch the ones that get to near
    'cause in the end
    We all pretend

    that we're all grand
    that we're all stars
    Get yourself a lover
    Get on this week's cover
    You are grand
    Yeah, you're a star

    Yeah, we're all grand
    Yeah, we're all stars
    Get yourself a lover
    Get on this week's cover
    You are grand
    Yeah, you're a star




    Submitted on 2005-06-20 16:50:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Punch the ones that get to near -> too near
    I think that was about it as far as spelling goes.
    This was quite entertaining actually. I really don't know how this song goes so while I read it I just sort of subconsciously followed a rhythm that turned out Cheerleading-sounding. Then I had to stop, and read it monotonously.
    It's very sad how much people alter themselves to become "worthy" enough for the media and such sources.
    I see it as something similar to a sex change. It's disgusting and it's lying to yourself.

    But you really shouldn't mind me...
    "'cause in the end
    We all pretend"

    Suven!
    | Posted on 2005-07-08 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      are you sure you aren't a songwriter? lol i like it a lot, but the flow stopped for me at get yourself a lover, but then when i gave it more of a chance it all works. it's good, it's very real and i wouldn't know what to change...it would be fun to turn it into music.

    -tracy
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by chalky | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds like me. I would like to get recognized. Yup of course doesn't everyone. We all want to be noticed..

    About the lyrics. I love them, I made a kind of rythem for them. They are well written and I completely love them.. Seriously. I am gonna add this to my favs...

    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]


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