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    dots Submission Name: No appreciaitondots
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    Author: dylanpoe
    ASL Info:    21 m la
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 322/332/56
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       this is a little thought of why do we think everything we have good is all coincedence.if you sit and think there would not even be a site if it wasnt for him. and i think that more people outta show a little something for being able to do what they do.its us pro athletes, hell everybody is in the same boat. let me know what you think about this thanks


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    dotsNo appreciaitondots
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    there's a time and a place
    to thank him of his grace
    for what he's done for you

    there's a cross and cause
    there was only one life lost
    and look what you do to him

    no appreciation, nobody's changing their lives


    there's sin and there's shame
    but yet there is a name
    but nobody can seem to call it

    there's a graveyard and there's a home
    where many tears have been cried
    but yet we still say we're alone

    nevermind the miracles, only coincedences
    true talents with the pen and the mind
    but everybody tarnishes his sign

    no appreciation, nobody's changing their lives




    Submitted on 2005-06-21 00:41:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      most people think they did everything on their own with no help. god could of taken away what you have because maybe your future would be a diaster because of it. people dont give him credit for most of the incredible things that happen to them. happens all the time with my family. people should think more like this and thank him whatever they have even if it is little. lovely words.
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]
      More people need to wake up and learn to appreciate more then what it just in front of them. If you can't see it...you often forget. Glad to see that you are wakin people up and that you do appreciate more. That is great.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      if this poem stands...as what you pin it as...then why write it

    doesn't writtening it show the opisite nature of what you mean to say in this poem

    and more over my writing explaining it to you

    the only thing i dont agree with you on is this one thing

    the written word

    poetry is our expression...he does not give us these words

    they may be for him

    but they are our own

    on the flipside
    -DS
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe in what your trying to say. I believe that the talents we have are "God given" gifts. Those who think that they are the ones who made themselves great are the ones who havent realize the "glory" of greatness. As for me, "good writer's are born not made" so I thank God for giving me such gift. To be a good writer you need to have the wisdom and understanding that comes from God,..to those who show no appreciation that God gave them all this things, maybe they're good enough but not "great" enough. I appreciate your write and I know God does too.
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Joyce RL | [ Reply to This ]
      I appreciate most poems that show repect for God so I will not make any comment on the subject matter. I am not a trained writer so often I miss the mark on some poems but I found the rhyme scheme hard to follow. You had two lines that rhymed then that pattern changed to alternate lines and no rhyme at all. I'm probably showing what a simple fellow I am here but I had difficulty finding the pace in this work. Dan
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      Aye dawg, this was tight. I know what you are saying. No body does seem to appreciate anything. Some do. Yet, in this generation, no one does. I haven't seen any body respectful in a long time.

    Fav.

    Dialo
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Xtremebiter | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know...I read this and then I read your other poem that you just posted, and it seems as though you don't follow your own preaching here. It's one thing to respect God and show appreciation, but then turn around and throw out profanities and attack other people seems hypocritical, if you ask me.

    I don't know...this poem is fine, but the other one left a bad taste in my mouth, kind of hard to reconcile that they come from the same person.

    Why write to attack? I just don't see the sense in it...

    Either way though, you are entitled to your own words and feelings and thoughts, as are everyone else
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice to see someone not afraid to post a religous poem. You neva know how good something is til it's gone. Humans are stupid, greedy fools always wishing for more when they should be happy just to be alive.
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Emmalee | [ Reply to This ]


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