Scab

Author: lynn marsters ASL Info:    20/f/canada Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32 Words: 107

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Scab

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a fresh, deep wound slowly begins to scab I don't think of you everyday I begin to heal It stops hurting so goddamn bad A little bit of good medicine A little bit of bad medicine And I begin to forget A thin crust seperates me from the pain and then you come by and you rip the fucker off and it bleeds harder and faster than before IT HURTS SO BAD Why can't you just let it heal? Why can't I get over you? Why must you fuck with me like this? and why can't I stop you?

Submitted on 2005-06-21 01:59:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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well, you can certainly get the harshness of your feelings on the paper, but try to put some dark or disgusting words in stead of swearings to vent your anger, or if the swearings are a must, at least try to express the pain you feel with a combination of words, not by just pressing Caps Lock and typing your soul out. I ain't an expert but that is my opinion, you don't have to abide to it. workshop ! seeya

| Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by shoggoth | [ Reply to This ]

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