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    dots Submission Name: We Fail Sometimesdots
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    Author: HurtDeepDown
    ASL Info:    24/F/OHIO
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 165/161/42
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    Description:
       Just about friendships.


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    dotsWe Fail Sometimesdots
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    There were days we'd laugh together,
    but these days all you do is weep,
    or stare off somewhere,
    so you buried eyes search for words I can't hear.
    Sorry if I put you through this,
    if your mistakes were my fault,
    but you don't seem to listen nor care,
    so why expect so much out of me?
    I have dealt with these freys before,
    when problems came along,
    it was too much for me to handle,
    but that's what best friends are for.
    So next time when your worries go too far,
    don't create a wound and watch it bleed,
    my hands are here to pull you out of the darkest holes,
    my only wish is for you to never hurt again,
    cause when you hurt...
    I do too.




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