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    dots Submission Name: Judgementdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       "Those who put out the people's eyes, reproach them for their blindness." John Milton, poet

    or as it says in the bible about noticing the stick in your brother's eye as a log is protruding from yours (sorry, can't remember the verse off hand)...just a little spontaneous write for all the judgemental comments I see sometimes.

    As fellow creators we should have the ability to not be so judgemental of other's creations. That's just my thought.

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!


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    dotsJudgementdots
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    How easily the stick
    in my eye
    Became the log
    impeding your sight...
    The words of expression
    spoken in verse
    You the judge
    of what is right.




    Submitted on 2005-06-21 17:56:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Concise but meaningful... well done. ALthough i cannot say i utterly comprehend your poem but i think your trying to convey that by being writers and poets we are the judges of the world... just my perception but any apreciate this poem.. Great job p.s. i am a tru fan of short but meaningful poems
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Versifier | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it was a bit short and with more length will come more meaning. I am a bit comfused with it as well but i'm sure every word you chose you chose for a reason. I like the enjembment used in this peice to give it some extra lenght though. This was short and all i can think to say about it is try to lengthen it a bit more, if you do that it will be better...i think anyways:)
    *Samy*
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by samyalone | [ Reply to This ]
      This was alright
    Not too descriptive
    and like they said
    It needed more
    I didnt understand it though
    How a stick in your eye
    Became the log in someone elses
    lol
    Weird
    Good anyways =P
    Big Bill-
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting if not puzzeling. The first four lines seem to echo the Milton quote i.e My pain is blamed for your problems. The next four lines are particularly opaque. If the words of expression in verse are a poem of your pain, is judged by others as to rightness. But if I'm right about the beginning then the judgement should come from the pain or inconveince it causes the "Judge" - is this a fair interpretation?

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-06-21 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmmm...interesting poem :)...Although I have to say, it's a fine line we walk on this sight of being usefully critical and overly critical. Nobody wants to leave a blahblahblahit's great comment on a bad poem :P Anywho...very nice write epipharoosky :)

    stwwww
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      wOw..i like it! it has a spice to it..very well written & i like how its tiny yet so strong..nicce! lol i cant honestly say i can relate to it but its very good- xO- Nita
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by iN xO Love | [ Reply to This ]
      If someone has the bravery to expose themselves through the art form of poetry, they make themselves vulnerable. Only bein loving and knowing how to give feedback so that is comes across in a positive way is acceptable. I have a fan who reads but doesn't write me unless there is something to eat up, and be negative about. If you have no suggestions, please do not write. since we are a mirror of each other obviously, what bothers me about you, I have also. Thanks for sharing, we could write volumes on the bashing here but I prefer to write,
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      good for you! some people like nothing better than to stir stuff up around here and make nasty comments. i remember what my mamma used to say, "if you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all..." more or less, true. no need to go bashing someone's work. poetry comes from the heart and soul and should be honored as such. if it doesn't move you, move on.

    thanks for sharing!
    @ peace&trees @
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-06-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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