aww this is sweet Im sure kjb is proud. If u want u can make it longer it you dont then you shouldnt I think is fine the way it is but if u want to put more detail then yea make it longer if not is perfect. Great Job Im glad you actually have someone to care for you.
I like it, short and sweet and simple, I don't think lengthening it would do anything, i think it says what it says and it says it good and in a touching way.
This was a cute piece. The short and sweet effect made it more...strong? I think you could've added a bit more though, it seemed almost incomplete. Loved the end
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