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The Emo Poem Part 2


Author: wordslinger
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Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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Yes. It's all over.


The Emo Poem Part 2



My Name is No longer John.
Witness Protection Comes
When you kill your whole family
And say the Mafia did it
Five weeks with Freud
I cut him too
Now all I gotta do
is finish the job.
I raise the scissors
My name is no longer John.




Submitted on 2005-06-21 22:19:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hahaha. Well i guess i shouldnt laugh.. But some how this struck me as comical. I think this is a great piece with a great story written with minimal words. These are my favourite types of poems to write. I think of them as written photographs.
Good job.
Ratio M. Ducet III
| Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by Ratiomeducet | [ Reply to This ]


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