Description: Driving into the country is a metaphor for withdrawal.
Physics and general relativity represent being moved by forces beyond your control.
The stars are shining love, calling to the soul.
I think you'll get the rest.
On a moonless night, driving far into the country
where no city lights diminish the vision of heaven,
her life is only physics and general relativity.
Previously gravity pulled her towards a grand glow.
She settled into an orbit about another
heavenly body until the last flare was withdrawn.
With a sun too close her eyes are blinded in brightness.
Now she understands that it is on the dark nights
that the stars become diamonds scattered on velvet.
Only from the unlit space does she see the jewels.
She stares into the voluminous void of space
as longing tugs and tears tears from her heart.
The drops have no meaning in themselves.
It is just the gravity of the situation
and lack of physical sensation.
Using the points of reflected twinkles
in the pool of overly emotional eye drops
she plots the course to her destiny.
Wonderful! Loved it! Far from the glare of "city lights" the view of the "heavens" is spectacular. Whether, one drives there to save oneself or just to get away, the stars become "jewels" against an "unlit" "velvet" sky. Emotions will surely rise as one peers into the "void" of "space". A dream of "stellar" love would certainly rise, unfettered, into one's imagination. It's a lovely thought!
Notes: S1 - L3 - "only" I would change to "but". L4 - Comma, after "Previously". L7 - Tense, shouldn't "are" be "were". S2 - L1 "from" I would change to "in". L2 - Should be "void". L3 - "tares" should be "tears".
A wonderful vision of dreaming upon the stars, of the majesty of the spacial blanket, and the sheer beauty of the night sky. As a place to find hope, there is none better, for it is limitless in possibilities, and as open to dreams as it is to wishes. For someone in search of peace and happiness, there is nothing as serene as the unincumbered view of heaven. The void is soundless, without light, and empty of any matter. The distances between stars are measured in lightyears. If one wishes for solitude, it presents itself in the "unlit spaces".
Thanks for this "ride into the country", I enjoyed the view.
I agree with Phil so there is little for me to say because he said everything I was thinking. What I can say is that this was beautiful. The style and form is one that I enjoy. Your words speak of experience and knowledge a quality that can only be earned and you expressed it with sincere images that are relevant in any time or space. I am going to take a look a some of your other work and thanks for the trip to the country. Terence McGovern
Hey Chrys, I 'm curious if one can actually aim and take fire at a new love, If so, you must have a choice in mind? The goddess festival makes me wonder. I hope she comes soon what you offer is surely being missed and is just right for someone. As for heaven, the love we give is inspired by the Source, a glittering velvet sky, would tame any longing heart. Love is...a reason for gratitude. Thanks for being you, beautiful. Nan
Yes....away from the city, from the noise, the light pollution....and towards hand-woven, glittering skies....
I think only such incredible poetry could have made me appreciate the subtle references to physics
The occasional word play was wonderful, and the entire piece was just ....mesmerizing. It made me think of last night, half of which I spent sitting outside just staring at the moon in a halo and the stars around it....it was full and low and incredibly huge....
Sorry went off on a tangent there....
Wishing on the constellations...making them a plot for a new love...its all full of longing and hope and tranquility, and I might not have made much sense, but this piece has taken me to many places, and I am just incredibly grateful for the journey....
Stellar poem. This is whimsical and sparkling and melancholy and makes me want to have a good cry. I love the message though. I am happy you are plotting another course, happy those little eye drops can bring release. Get back up there on that horse...there are other stellar loves out there. It is in the stars for you. xo R.