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    dots Submission Name: Summer Daysdots

    Author: Aken Sol
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 197/204/67
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsSummer Daysdots

    As the Sun visits from below,
    It's gentle rays awaken me
    To another beginning.
    Birds chirp their melody
    And i close my eyes to listen.

    The gentle rustling of nature
    Is shown, by the flower's dance.
    Each petal fluttering
    In a garden of colors
    With each warm, passing breeze.

    Walking on the field,
    I squeeze my toes with each step
    To feel the moist soil and
    The brushing grass,
    Beneath me.

    I lie down with the ground
    As my pillow, watching
    The sky reel from right to left.
    Morphic clouds floating on blue,
    Tell me their story.

    As the Sun dips its shades
    Into the ocean.
    The sky slowly darkens
    But night was lighted by moonshine
    And the glitter of sprinkled stars.

    Listening to the cricket's songs
    I slowly drift away.
    The moon becomes transparent,
    As the Sun rises from its slumber
    And outshines it.

    Damn, another day wasted.

    Submitted on 2005-06-22 09:05:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha.. i like that you think this poem is going to be one of those mushy "what a great day" poems but your end line is like dammit i was daydreaming all day and now I freakin have no time left to do anything important! ... i really enjoyed this thanks for makin me smile:)
    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by rocknpoetrychik | [ Reply to This ]
      Tight work. Some awesome imagery in this piece. I loved the neding. That was really unexpected. Keep writing. I''ll keep reading.

    | Posted on 2005-06-22 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]

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